in my dreams i am i am

Hey!
This for Big Review and running late! Sorry about that >.>

My favorite bit of this poem is probably the Cinderella stanza and the one right after it... Stanza four and five is probably a better way to express that. I just like the twist there. The speaker isn't afraid to stand because they might shatter which is what I was expecting.

The one thing I can really pick out of this poem is a lack of symmetry within the content. To explain, I'm going to point out the first two stanzas. Three items get one line, the dragon metaphor gets four. Then in stanza six, you bring up this spiral staircase and list the object you are in a different order than you brought them up in.

...I'm afraid I'm doing some crazy nitpicking/letting my OCD out... Oh well! The staircase is what really gets to me more than the other stuff I brought up. I can see why you would give the dragon four lines and I think you changed the order of the list for format reasons. The staircase though... I like the imagery, but because everything else was mentioned, I get the feeling that it was tacked in there because it's pretty.

I was really impressed with this poem. Yay for nitpicks, I guess! xD

Happy review day,
Megs~

Hey there!

So, I read this for the first time yesterday evening and I couldn't wait to give it a review, I loved it so much. Unfortunately I didn't have the time to review it until now. But in a way I am kind of glad that I had to wait because it allowed me to come back and read it once more.

And to my great happiness, this piece is just as refreshing as when I first read it!

There is something to be said about a piece of writing that reveals something new to you every time you read it, and I feel like your poem is that type of timeless piece that everyone can find meaning in. The varying degrees of specificity that you used for your metaphors give your piece the potential to connect with a lot of people. I enjoyed the juxtaposition of the vividness of the description of the dragon and the knight, as compared to the open ended-ness that the image of a moor conjures. Even if the reader hasn't imagined him or herself as Cinderella or a knight in shining armour, there are other lines in the poem which are just abstract enough to elicit some recognition in most everyone. The fact that you have managed to create a piece with the potential for such a far reaching message is a great accomplishment!

Without going into too much detail on how nice I thought the structure fit the content, I have to say that your choice of punctuation was effortlessly perfect. The use of italics and the varied structure of the sixth stanza complemented the poem rather than hindered it. It felt very authentic. I admire you for your ability to enhance your writing with these tools. It shows a great maturity that seems both planned and spontaneous: a natural rhythm of words tumbling from your head straight to the page.

What else can I say? I couldn't find one single thing that I disliked about this piece! It hit every mark: it was structured nicely, it flowed well, it told a story, it was lyrical and vivid, abstract and insightful. And to top it all off the title of the poem is perfect – I can't express how much I love it!

I realize this review contains absolutely no critiques, but I enjoyed this piece so much that I can't bear to say anything bad about it – let alone find something wrong with it in the first place. Thank you for sharing this lovely work! I really look forward to reading more by you. Keep up the amazing writing!

I simply loved this poem. It shows that in your dreams anything is possible. It seems more like a song somebody would sing. After reading this it feels like you are the narrator. You are the one telling everyone what you are in your dreams, even if it is impossible in the real world.
In this dream world the narrator is in, she becomes everything she wanted or wants to be, a dreamer.

One of the best poems I have read I must say. Keep up the great work.

This poem has a nice turn of events. I actually sung it when I wad reading it. It has a nice tune to it and reminds me of something I would write. But that point aside, it goes through all these settings and imagery to explain how she thinks of herself. And how she is viewed by a possible lover or someone else and how they view her is not enough for her. Because she has dreams of what she could be and their thought of her limits her possibility
of who she could be. I like this poem, but in alternate-it would be better with the use of rhyming. But then again, that very effect could take away from the novelty of your voice, but that is the only thing I can think of your to consider. Maybe more use of complex words and terms.
That is all, card dragon.