Young Writers Society

I have never read a poem like this before, but I loved it. I can totally relate to you and your poem. Great job.

I absolutely love this poem. Don't really have the time to write a review, but just wanted to put that out there. It's snarky and I very much relate to it.

The minute I read this I was distinctly impressed. The poem is completely relatable and introduces such expressive feelings to a moment very few find the words to describe. The humor is perfectly aligned and masterfully crafted at the end. I absolutely love this. Could have used more imagery though, just putting it out there. It's your work and you knew what you wanted to convey and I'm sure you hit the mark precisely.

Well, this was a tiny bit confusing, I didn’t get the feeling, so, like Vil wrote, you should use imagery. And, I really loved the last line,
“ I say
PLEASE
don’t be boring.

And it says
Beyond China’s central role in East Asia was its economic interaction with wider world of Eurasia.”

It was funny. I liked this poem otherwise. Keep writing. Bye.

Hey there, @silverquill12! It's Vilnius here with a review!

What I Like
I am taking much pleasure in your pain and suffering in Chinese economic history, mostly because economics = politics = I am a happy person. I'll do the reading for you! XD

I think that by using caps-only in some of the words, you place extra emphasis behind them, lending to how I love reading about how tortured you feel... er, I mean... uh... You know what I mean XD

What I Dislike
I feel like more imagery could have been used as you described your pain, allowing me to enjoy it all the more letting the readers more adequately understand how you feel.


In Summary
I liked this, but I think a bit more imagery could have been used to more effectively describe your mental pains with this so that I could better enjoy it.

Have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!!

Hi there silverquill! Tuck here to bring you a review today.

Overall, I found the message to be something every student can relate to. I can appreciate and relate to the angst that accompanies taking advanced courses in high school, as well as the way advanced history textbooks seem to be particularly dry. The repetition of "beyond" began to take on a double meaning that I felt you executed well to create some structure and well-utilized repetition in your poem. On the whole, your message was solid, so allow me to get picky for a bit with the presentation and execution of that message.

Something I'd love to see you do more with this poem is play around with the positioning of the words on the page. For example, your first stanza:

WHY
are these words
DANCING on the page?