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Hey there!
I love the topic of this poem. It's very consistent and flows nicely. I like the way you elaborated on the first line of each stanza. I particularly liked this stanza

I call my cat a name,

put too much trust in false gods,

and fraternize with dark figures.

I am

what the kids call

a chaotic mess; (or you can put a dash)



Racing around

trying to find some semblance

of steadiness within my being.

I call my cat a name,

I am

what I call

me.

Hello! This is my first review on YWS. I hope you find something helpful in here.

This is a poem that explores the topic of identity. I really like the way the poem is written; as I read it, it flows very easily and naturally off my tongue. 'Identity' can be a highly complex and philosophical topic - so the fact that you have written your poem so simplistically strikes me as particularly unique and interesting.

I get the impression that through your poem, you try to describe as genuinely and accurately as possible, how you might be viewed in other people's eyes and that you are ultimately trying to convey the message that those perceptions are both right and wrong at the same time. Right because all perceptions are true within their confines and under their own lights. Wrong because no single perception can completely define someone. Reminds me of a quote by someone (Alan Watts?) where he draws an analogy between the peels of an onion and the different layers of self.

At least that's my interpretation. I feel that your poem can have several plausible interpretations, especially because it is an accessible poem that deals with a complex topic (which is a good thing!). In one line - it is a poem that makes you ponder.

I have no real negatives to point out. Maybe you could add a few more stanzas as right now, it is a poem that can be read rather quickly. But this is entirely up to you and refrain from doing so unless you really have something substantial to add. It is a jolly fine poem as it is.

Ashwin

Hello, hello! I am here to review.

So, I get this, much of this anyways. I can't stand labels either, unless they help me to process something about myself or another person but otherwise they are just a bother, a way to beat another person down about something they like or have.

I like the stanza, how each is its own thing. They describe well and are simplistic in nature. It's a nice, short read and is easy to understand, much of it relatable to me and hopefully others that have read it!

Otherwise, to be honest, I don't have much to say! Good work.

- Cow

Hey Quill, I'm Myth and I'll be dropping a small review for you.

"I" is something that's always there. It just exists. The very idea of "self" is just too deep a root to understand. Which is why I chose to review this poem. From everything I read, I saw simplicity. I saw a simple view. I saw eyes looking straight, and not sideways. I saw a point.

It's very difficult to find something that's right in front of you, all the time. You've managed to do that through this. It's simple and impressive. I liked that. I don't have much to say. I just want to say that this is pretty impactful.

Keep writing.

Yours sincerely,
Myth

Hi, silverquill!

What an impactful poem! I absolutely loved reading this because I deeply identified with it in some way (fellow mess and fangirl). Conversely, I liked reading it because it was also purely personal to you (?), I'm assuming. So the thing is, I'm not well informed with poetry and probably not very trustworthy with anything that I say regarding it. Just take whatever you want from this review with the knowledge that I don't really know what I'm doing.

I am

what the kids call

a chaotic mess.

I am what the kids call
a chaotic mess.

I have never broken

a vase or a law,

and I would never dream of talking back to an adult.

I have never broken

a vase or a law,

and I would never dream

of talking back to an adult.