The air is toxic,
My skin burns,
Pin-pricks of stars are stuck to my arms,
They boil my blood,
My breathing is slow,
Here comes the Crazy!
There goes the Crazy!
Leaving us with a message,
That we are the Crazy,
Never rhyme rhyme with time,
Because it's cliché,
Well, that's what I say,
And neva rite wit korekt gramer or punctuation,
Otherwise the poem loses meaning,
Brush your hair with a toothbrush,
Back with a hairbrush,
Teeth with a backbrush,
Brush your dog with the cat's brush,,
Remember:
If you're not on the edge, you're taking up too much space,
If you're not flying high, it's easier to hit a tree and die,
Walking fast is just running slow,
Now you're tutorial is complete:
Welcome to the Crazy!
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This was really interesting. I've never really reviewed poetry before, but this.... This was amazing! Interesting. I had to re-read just to understand it, and that means you've caught my interest.
Good job not many people can catch my interest. You've got talent for writing poetry and stories, so basically keep writing. You've got talent.
Thanks for the reviews guys!
Pretty Crazy > I suppose it would.
Lol I loved it! I usually don't review poetry, but you got my attention. I had to say something. :3
Awesome work!
~Crazy
Hi there.
This was cute. ^^ I enjoyed it.
I don't think this stanza is really relevant to your poem? I don't really think you need it there.
Otherwise, this is very good. You had some great lines like "Pin-pricks of stars are stuck to my arms," and "If you're not on the edge, you're taking up too much space,".
*Likes*
Wow, I like this, I really haven't got anything to say that you need to change most of it was intinsional I believe... other then this
"Pin-pricks of stars are stuck to my arms,"
I think this should be two lines... like
"Pin-pricks of stars
are stuck to my arms,"
Love the poem,
~Rain~