Gravity
Verse 1:
Every time our eyes make contact,
Secret messages convey,
Our feelings and emotions so dense,
There's gravity
Chorus 1
Gravity, there's gravity...
Gravity, there's___ gravity.
Verse 2:
Every time our fingers touch,
Accidentaly (Accidentally)
There's a rush...
Verse 3:
Every time I hear your voice,
I sing aloud (Aloud)
It's like I have no control,
It's like I have no choice...
Chorus 2:
Gravity, there's gravity...
(Between us two)
Gravity! Gravity!
Sing along and you can feel...
Bridge:
Gravity in effect,
Pulling, Pulling,
Away from the earth...
Me to you,
You to me...
Don't resist, just fly away,
Sing a song as you rush up to greet me,
Don't resist, sing a song,
As you fly up to greet me...
(Gravity...)
(Chorus 2)
Gravity, there's gravity...
(Between us two)
Gravity! Gravity!
Sing along and you can feel...
(Chorus 1)
Gravity, there's gravity...
Oh, there's gravity, there's___ gravity.
Gravity, there's gravity...
Feel it pulling us together,
Gravity, Gravity Gravity...
(END)
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Hey guys, these are my first Lyrics! Okay, I'm not sure where Bridge goes so if you could help there... yeah. Also, this is not John Mayer's "Gravity" tune but more upbeat like "Belief". What did you think?
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hey, so the bridge seems to be in the correct place. What I think is interesting about this song is the two choruses. I like because I think it allows for the tension to grow and build the song up then slowly let it back down again. I think you could maybe put verses two and three together. I don't see why you separated them unless, there is a musical interlude? Overall, I love the subject of this song, of the gravity and pulling two people together. It's sweet. Nice job for your first lyrics.
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