Hey, hope all is well. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. The imagery you used to describe the setting is very nice. I can feel how hot the weather is. A previous review mentioned this being a setting for a football field but could this have been an archaeology site? The orange soil, the fossils in amber, the landscape and dislodging of rocks? It just makes more sense to me
However, I do agree with another reviewer on the uncertainty of the narrator. Why are they unsure? Does the cotton or bottle cap represent something? Is there supposed to be an extension of this poem into another poem to continue the story? Or was that just left over debris from previous digging and swabbing? Either way, very nice word play and good work
Points: 349
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