Young Writers Society

Hi Lim! This is loveissourgrapes and I am here to review/comment on your poem. This reminds me of a board I have on Pinterest and it has many cats, flower [mostly dandelions hehe], and the poem in general gives off that vibe. I forgot what was it called, something core? Anyways, time to answer your questions. <3

Liminality wrote:1. What do you think of the line "like dandelion fluff/ or cat hair" - does it squeeze too many similes/images into one description?

Liminality wrote:2. What do you think the "I" in the poem is doing/ thinking?

Liminality wrote:3. Ideally, how many cats should there be in this poem? (Or any poem?)

Hello Lim! The alpaca has come to give you a review! This is a light-hearted, airy piece, quite reminiscent of the cottage core aesthetic. Let's start the review, but let me review your work by answering your questions

1. What do you think of the line "like dandelion fluff/ or cat hair" - does it squeeze too many similes/images into one description?
- Personally, I really like the line "like dandelion fluff". It leaves the reader to imagine how it's like. Will it look like a field of dandelions, each head popping out like fluff? Will it look like a coherent sea of dandelions, wonderfully yellow or pure white? Even with such abstract description, I can imagine what the dress looks like and I believe it will be different for everyone which is the beauty of this description. The cat hair, honestly, threw me off though hahaha. Personally, dandelion fluff is a wonderful description and cat hair....maybe not as much

2. What do you think the "I" in the poem is doing/ thinking?
- What "I" is doing is relaxing and pensively looking into the distancing. As for thinking, there are so many things that "I" can be thinking. Perhaps their head is so full of troubling thoughts that they need a breather. Maybe they simply want to enjoy life so they are there at the balcony. Then again, you used the beauty of ambiguity to your advantage to engage the reader's imagination. This is something I need to improve on as I like to get straight to the point.

3. Ideally, how many cats should there be in this poem? (Or any poem?)
Two or more judging from the line "cats’ curling tails"
As for any poem, there is no limit to the number of cats you can include. Fluffy, cute, tame cats are great


Overall, this is a beautiful poem! It's something I would read again and again and still find it fresh and wonderful.

This is alpacaboss, signing off.