Young Writers Society

Hello Ley! Your second review from me today. Either congratulations or my condolences, you decide which.

Your command of words is admirable. You shape images and feelings both deliberately and easily. A few of my favorites are:

A crack in the vortex of reality

each droplet being a final prayer in infinite

(but I recommend making it "the infinite" here, the lack of "the" pulled me out of the rhythm.)

a solitary being that warps and changes with each second;

I have one real critique, and it was something as small as a possible typo.

A plead gone unanswered.

It needs to be "a plea".

Keep writing and creating beauty! You are an artist who paints with words.

~Pickled Chrissy

hi ley! here's some thoughts about this poen:

-this poem speaks to me on superficial levels. the feeling of trying to set things back to normal, and trying to be normal again but just being unable to is so... relateable
-ugh the space metaphors. i love them. space is such a vast expanse that so often goes unexplored, yet poetry with it is so so beautiful.
-"a plead gone unanswered" "i. am. broken." <333 i love these


nothing much to go here.
only that you should write more like this.

i love this poem so much you don't even know
this poem is my blood right now <333

ilysm <3
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