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KJ-
Oh. Oh. Oh!! I'm really lovin' Vick's character.
Now the situation from New York, is that somewhat in the present too? -- Okay, don't listen to me. I might know too much.
Another great chapter, KJ!
And I can't wait to learn about Vick's past. Off to read ten!!
-Merry
~Oh, sorry for writing short reviews. I just had bunch of questions for each chapter~
I personally like ‘Signs’ better.
This is turning out to be very, very cool. . . . . .I wonder. . . . .
Heh, I love that movie.
Hm, interesting, so Vick has a weird past too!
Anyway, I didn't see any mistakes in this chapter except that you've made this story really addicting.
I must go find out about this creepy past and more about Mr. Sheldon.
Excellent bit of work, dear!
Well, I read through the whole thing, and more than once I might add. It was superbly written-maybe even your best one yet! I agree with Angel, and I can't find any flaws or things needing tender loving corrections. (ha ha) I can't wait until chapter ten-the drama has grabbed me and it's claws just keep sinking deeper and deeper and it won't let go...not that I'd want it to! Well, I'll look forward to reviewing and/or reading what happens next! (still on the edge of my chair) Happy writing!
P.S. I think I've just found something, but I'm not entirely sure, so I'm just putting it out there to see what you think.
That's your sentence and here's what I think is wrong with this(and if I'm wrong about being wrong, blame my wacky english teachers-not that they weren't good, they just go over the same thing-noun, verb, adjectives-year after year...sorry, my little rant is over
Now, I don't know if that dash actually belongs there, but for some reason a comma just didn't seem to work for me. I don't know-I'm probably just being crazy, but there's my suggestion. Hope it helped a little! Talk to you later!
Thanks for the heads up KJ!
This was a very sweet chapter and I falling in love with Vick more and more. I didn't see anything wrong, this was completely flawless. I can't wait for the next chapter and sorry for the short review but this story is just so great.
Until next time,
~Angel