Because - Chap. 15

by KJ

Published November 24, 2008

In Because

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Merry_Haven
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Merry_Haven wrote a review Review · Jan 26, 2009

*KJ~

Okay, this chapter really made me smile. It's was really cute. And I absolutely loved the ending. The whole I have super powers too thing was funny. Oh, and you made me laugh, too! Thanks.

Oh, I have to ask. Who's Serena? Was she introduced in the earlier chapters? And I have this really odd feeling that something bad might happen.

Otherwise, I have nothing else to say besides wanting to get to 16. And you know how in our conversations, I told you I'll just do 5 chapters per day? I'm not. I'll review as much as I can until my hands hurt from typing. And that's not your fault.

Great job!

*Merry

LOLLIPOPGIRL030 wrote a review Review · Nov 28, 2008

Gah, I loved this chapter! Like everyone else, I loved, "Watch out. I've got super powers too.'' :D It was real cute and kinda flirty for your character, which is unexpected, but I liked it. Serena, huh? Hope she doesn't pose a problem.:D haha
If you dont get this published, I'll will kill you!! Can't wait for the next chapter. Have a good Thanksgiving!

~~Nikki

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Sheik
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Sheik wrote a review Review · Nov 25, 2008

“Oh, Vick?” I smiled again.

“Yeah?”

“I have super powers, too. Watch out.”


Heh, that made me laugh. :)

Vick is such a complete guy. Some lady authors tend to make their men a little too girly, if you know what I mean. You don't, that's very good, I think. You're doing an excellent job developing his personality too. He does remind me a little of Mr. Sheldon. :lol:

I liked this chapter and I'm sad that I'm all done for now. :(

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Anna Graham
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Anna Graham wrote a review Review · Nov 25, 2008

*Applause* I loved this chapter! You're great at creative dialogue, and you manage to keep it realistic, too!
Vick is my hero! He's got so much character; you are a magician!

She stood there as I pressed it to my ear, and I gave her a look.
I played with my lower lip.

Little things like this make a story so realistic! Everyone else seems to forget to mention the little quirks people have, making them human. But not you! Well done!

Love it more!
--Anna

Angel of Death wrote a review Review · Nov 24, 2008

Ah, this was a very sweet chapter. I love Vick! There wasn't any jump-out problems that I saw, but I'm just sad that I have to wait till after the holidays for the next chapter. Have a nice holiday though! I'm going to use my vaycay to write but anyways...back to the story. An adorable chapter and a very entertaining story. I can't wait to read more and keep up the good work.

Ta for now,

~Angel

In_the_Moonlight wrote a review Review · Nov 24, 2008

That was so adorable. I was laughing so hard when he talked about his adventure of the day. Vick really does seem like a good guy for Becca but then I heard the name 'Serena'. I hope Vick's not the player type, but I don't think he'd do that to Becca. I bet with Vick helping her along Becca will face the demons in her closet and get her poetry mojo back. AWWWWWW..... :oops: sorry I still just think they make the cutest couple.

“I have super powers, too. Watch out.”


I'm loving this story. Can't wait till after thanksgiving to read the rest.

-Moony :D



It is only a novel... or, in short, only some work in which the greatest powers of the mind are displayed, in which the most thorough knowledge of human nature, the happiest delineation of its varieties, the liveliest effusions of wit and humour, are conveyed to the world in the best-chosen language
— Jane Austen, Northanger Abbey