Because - Chap. 7

KJ-
Uh. What happened to the football game? Or has that haven't happened yet?

“I’ll never let you go, Rebecca Chapman.” I love how you incorporate these small sentences of the past or present into the story. Great job!

I'm really liking Vick. I hope nothing does happen to him. That would be pretty sad.

Well, I'm off for eight.

-Merry

Haha! She dug her own grave!

I think Vick is really cool and I'm certain they're going to get along just fine. I love how Mr. Sheldon is haunting her and is, in some ways, still in control of her and her feelings. He overshadows all of her decisions concerning her new life, friends, and even how she thinks. It's very realistic.

Wonderful again, KJ!

Yay I love Vick, though calling him 'the kid' just really didn't sit well with me. Try 'he'. I really hope that he cures her insecurities and fears. I kept smiling myself every time he talked. And another reason why I liked him is because he doesn't look like the common male love interest in stories...he's unique. You had a couple of awkward sentences that if you read through this you could catch.
Lovely job as always,
~Angel

Wow that was just.....the cutest thing. I like Vick I hope he turns out to be good for her.

[quote]“No one will ever keep us apart.”

Was this line supposed to be in italics? That was really the only mistake I found. I absolutely cannot wait for more and more and more. Sorry that was a little weird, but it really is a wonderful story .