This orchestra needs no conductor,
Nor does it need accompaniment to play.
This needs only one musician,
And I know one, whose instruments are always well played.
As rare and serene as a violin is this musician,
and elicits cheers from the audience.
The musician's fingers grip the boe gently,
Strumming the violin and enticing its sweet notes to fly.
As powerful and regal as a trumpet is this musician,
Her never-flinching poise commanding attention.
Nimble fingers push piston after piston,
causing a royal fanfare to cascade onto the audience.
As deep as the beats of a bass drum are the emotions she emanates,
captivating the hearts of many.
Her hand rhythmically tapping the drum, ever careful to hit all the notes.
So you see, with this one musician, we don't need an orchestra.
For she is an orchestra,
Of rarity and serenity,
Of power and regality,
Of wonder and mystery,
Of purpose and joy,
An orchestra of them all.
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Hey Jevan13!
I love your poem! Your choice of words is just one of the things that makes this poem so great.
I don't see one line that could have been written better.
I believe good poems should have a good ending and yours certainly does! Just the way you go on at the end about how she is an orchestra of this and this builds up a great ending. Your last line "An orchestra of them all", has so much power and really emphasizes how great and wonderful the musician is.
This is what real poetry is!
Thank you so much for your kind words. I really did put my all into this one. I hope you enjoy the rest of my works.
-Jevan
Hey Jevan13!
I love your poem! Your choice of words is just one of the things that makes this poem so great.
I don't see one line that could have been written better.
I believe good poems should have a good ending and yours certainly does! Just the way you go on at the end about how she is an orchestra of this and this builds up a great ending. Your last line "An orchestra of them all", has so much power and really emphasizes how great and wonderful the musician is.
This is what real poetry is!
Hello, Jevan13, Lives4Christ24 is here for another review.
If I offend, it is not my intent. I strive to offer constructive criticism to other aspiring writers.
First of all, I love your poem and being a musician myself it really resonates with me. The poem has a good flow and is easy to read. Again, I really like your poem and hope to get to read more of your poetry. Thanks for writing.
Radrook here a once again to offer some suggestions.
Apologies if i offend. It isn’t my intention.
Please feel full free to cast aside all things you deem not helpful.
But if you do be sure its true by being extra careful.
That having been said:
Thanks for sharing this poem concerning how special a certain musician seems to be.
She needs no accompaniment, is rare, serene, poised, steady and never hesitating, and pleases the audience with her performance. I like the way that the poem builds up to a crescendo of praise and tops it off with this:
A very elegant use of vocabulary!
Very interesting poem.
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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. . . . who's instruments . . . . [Who's = who is]
[. . . . whose instruments . . . .]
. . . . grip the boe . . . .
[. . . . grip the bow . . . .]
Strumming the violin and enticing it's sweet notes to fly.
[Strumming the violin and enticing its sweet notes to fly.]
it’s = it is
Nor does it need a company to play.
[Nor does it need accompaniment to play.]
https://www.merriam-webster.com/diction ... ompaniment
Her never flinching poise commanding attention.
[Her never-flinching poise commanding attention.]
As deep as the beats of a drum . . . .
[As deep as the beats of a bass drum . . . .]
As usual Radrook, you have a great review. Thank you for your support thus far and for pointing out these silly mistakes of mine. I'll rectify these and take your suggestions seriously. Thanks again!