Knowledge, you give me not
Power, I do not want
You cannot satisfy me
‘Cos you barely know me
I’m not like them
Not like the people around me
I don’t like to talk,
But I truly love to walk;
It helps me relax;
And makes me deep in thought
I like to learn;
‘Cos knowledge is my love
I enjoy reading, writing
And I love sports
A place near nature
Is enough for me;
So if you look around
That’s where I’ll be
Now I’ve told you much
Now you simply know me
So don’t come humbly
Don’t come at all
I’m a thinker
Who definitely..
Doesn’t want to fall
You may not understand
But this is all I can say
Leave me now
Don’t talk to me after this day
I’m sorry if I’m harsh
I’m sorry if I’m cruel
But don’t you forget
I’m no fool
I’m no tool
I was born to leave a mark
In life, to have a spark
So don’t you ruin it
We only have one life
So live yours well
And so will I
We’ll all be judged
To either heaven or hell
So choose yours well
I like the over all pace and sound of it. The message is one I agree strongly with, and I think it was conveyed really well. It seems short in a few places, which kind of disrupts the pace and makes it awkward, but the smoothness of the poem is likely enough for it to not be noticed as much.
All in all an okay piece, well enough that it needs minimal editing.
Keep writing.
Peace xx
~Ayden~~
Hi HHemayed! Niteowl here with a review!
Overall, I think this piece has a strong message that's expressed well. Just a couple things I'd like to point out.
I enjoy reading, writing
And I love sports
Now I’ve told you much
Now you simply know me
So don’t come humbly
Don’t come at all
I’m a thinker
Who definitely..
Doesn’t want to fall
Hey there! Your poem seems pretty nice. I love the structure and rhyme, but you should add more feeling and try to play with metaphors, it's pretty fun. It's interesting in many ways, but it still misses that one thing that would draw more attention to reader's eyes. I hope I'll read more from you, Keep writing!
Hello! It's Magma here to review this fine poem here!
This is an awesome poem, but I just have to get one thing out of the way: The second verse. Just a little bit of alteration would help it, but currently it's like a big ugly rock thrown into a stream. It messes up the flow. Maybe if you removed the second line and the word 'truly' on the fourth, it would sound better. There's a little bit of incorrect grammar, but that's easily righted.
Apart from that, this poem is INCREDIBLE. It's got amazing words, a fantastic theme, and even a moral. This is what is commonly known as an "awesome poem". I could keep on typing all night about how much I love this poem, but I fear that my fingers might fall off 
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This is probably the worst-written review in the history of mankind, but anyway, thanks for the poem.
Wishing you a safe and happy life with paper,
Magma:D
Hey, Nargles here to review your wonderful work today!
Firstly this is great. I love the idea and thought behind it, I feel as if you have a great message behind this.
The flow is beautiful and nothing needs to be changed regarding that. I feel as if you captured the idea of knowledge, and what it means to life very well.
One nitpick I do have is in the third stanza, the last line for me, ruins the stanza. I would suggst rewording that just so it has a bit more flow. I'm not sure how you would, but you're probably a lot smarter than me and will be able to do it.
The last little thing is the use of grammar and what not. I'm not saying you need grammar but you have to decide whether to use it or not. There are parts where you nned something as you have used punctuation in other parts. The last couple of stanzas I think you might want to think about some.
I'm sorry this review isn't very good, hopefully it is of some help though.
I really enjoyed this poem, you are really talented.
Love Nargles xxx
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