Hey there.
At first, I thought this poem was about something like "good news" or a sweet motto or something like that, but suddenly yer talking about rumors? This needs expansion. And it needs less rhyme.
I've said it so many times, but I'll say it again, that in most cases, rhyme just serves to hamper the real message you wanted to get across with your poem. Please at least try a little free style? What does it mean for a rumor to be big? What does it mean for one to be small? The content of the rumor or how far it has spread? Clarify.
How do rumors make you fall? Really? We have to get some emotion in here, other than the passionate ending. We have to feel the depths of despair that rumors can bring us to for us to really value the ecstatic release you've served us at the end. That means showing us what a rumor is and what it doe and how it is insidious. How hard it is to stay strong, and what the temptations are to get weak.
Only by taking that journey with us will we shout thank you GOD with you.
Get closer to the matter, not farther. Take us in.
Keep writing, good luck, and let me know if you have any questions.
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