You stand in pitch black
In the middle of a world that lacked
What we truly want most:
Something not always found on every coast.
I want to see love
Indeed I do
I want to see love
Be directed to you.
It is rare that you see
What I give to you and what you give to me.
Our world has become too mean
Towards the evil side some do lean
I want to see love
Indeed I do
I want to see love
Be directed to you.
Our world does not stop to think
When someone is on an emotional brink.
Instead they are harsh and make lives worse
To me, this is truly a curse.
Can I see some love?
Indeed can I?
May I see some love
Be directed to my dearest?
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It is AWESOME! I really like how every single line rhymes, and how some parts repeat. It's just so BEAUTIFUL!!!!
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~ Sunset101
It is AWESOME! I really like how every single line rhymes, and how some parts repeat. It's just so BEAUTIFUL!!!!
Aww, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.
Sorry, I rewrote the review and made it longer.
AMAZING!!
When I rea the first couple of phrases, I'm just like YES, RHYMING!!!
Lots (I'm not sure about lots, but some) poems on here don't have any rhyming. Sure, some poems are good without rhyming, but others really need it. And you did a great job with rhyming. Honestly—I think this is why I'm bad at poetry—I suck at rhyming!
Your spelling is all correct, and I didn't notice any grammar mistakes.
Last thing: It's a love poem! I love love poems!
Okay, anyways, hope I helped and byeeeee!
~ WillowPaw1
Thanks I am glad you liked this!
Oh my gosh, this is amazing!!! As soon as I saw the title, I was compeled to read this poem.
And, since this is a review, you can already tell its gonna be a good one! Here ya go!
Spelling: perfect! I noticed no mistakes what-so-ever!
Grammer: same as spelling! nothing wrong!
Ryming: all but the last stanza had ryming in it, but im not concerned about that.
Rating: I rate this 5 stars and 10 out of 10!!!
Great job, Em101cats!
(and yes I know that I spelled 'grammer' and 'ryming' wrong but so what!?!)
KEEP MAKING POETRY OR I SHALL CRY!!!
~puppys3117~
The last stanza was supposed to be non-rhyming for extra affect (and I could not think of any more rhymes oh well XD) thanks for reviewing, glad you liked it!