Hello there!
We have already discussed (a lot) on this matter, at least that's what I'd like to think. And I can’t agree more with what Strange has mentioned in his review. But unlike him, I exactly know where this comes from and I can very well relate to the vandalised theatres. Though, I couldn’t stop reflecting on the fact that how straight-forward this poem is. It’s like you are rebellious and almost very proud of it. Well, if that’s what you wanted to do, then I guess you have succeeded in creating that atmosphere for me. And unfortunately, that’s where my problem lies.
As a person who loves metaphors and to interpret deep dark meanings, this poem did not excite me. For all it did, it only felt like a slap on my face saying, “yea, eat that!” Moreover, you are only stating very obvious pointers of a satirist. Take this for example:
They’ll ask me my faith,
I know; I have one.
I’m connected to God,
Devoid of any other chains.
If you would have said that you have no religion then no one would take you seriously. Because hey, you are one of those people who hates everyone and everything. So of course you have a religion. This is what I call the business statics. You know what’s in the combo yet you disagree with the tax that comes with it. Just like every other person, there isn’t any speciality in it. Do you see what I’m trying to say? X.X
I’m an apolitical rationalist
Who’ll force you to think!
As a satirist, that comes in your curriculum vitae.
I guess this is where you lost control of it. You should have rather concentrated on “the attacks” or “the protest” that comes with the job rather than telling us what you do and the effect/impact it has on the society, unless you were trying to do exactly that. In which case, we know what your job is, especially with all that’s happening all around the world.
I know, what I’ve suggested is me asking you to completely strike this off and I’m sorry, I’m not trying to write down your idea. I’m merely suggesting what would work if you want audience. Tell us something we don’t know. Atleast, make it up. >.>
Feel free to shoot me a PM, if you need anything else.
Keep writing!
Cheers! c:
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