He died today.
Cremated or organ donated
I dont know what he exactly did.
He was blessed with afterlife. Like everyone.
Nope. There was no soul transformation. Neither any mystical power.
Afterlife was his. But not exactly his. The powers were with people who knew him.
His memories. That pleasant smile, benevolent demeanor. Selfish for some. Courteous for others.
He had no control over his afterlife. People could shape it the way they wanted. Interpretations of his life varied.
Deeds determine your afterlife i had heard. They really do. Sam was a murderer. They remembered him as shameless criminal. Jack was an activist. They have been cheering for him since decades.
I realize the importance of Heaven and Hell. Heaven is your missing presence. Hell is when they detest you.
I don't know about reincarnation. I know about afterlife. It surely does exist.
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Hi, DrFeelGood! Mage here to review your work! So let's get to it, shall we?
This was a very interesting read. I like how you stress the importance of interpretation, and how people view you affects how you end up after you're gone. The same can be said for life; you are affected by the judgements of those who know you, and those judgements are never guaranteed to be the same.
There should be a period after "donated."
There should be an apostrophe in between "don" and "t" in "dont".
I love this part. It does a great job of showing how people can view others in two very different ways.
I loved these two lines. The contrast was a great way to summarize the concept you wanted to deliver in this poem (which you did a wonderful job of doing so), and is also a really cool way to word it.
Keep up the good work - which I doubt you'll have trouble with - and good luck on your writing endeavors! Have a great day/night!
This is an amazing poem. How did you come up with it? I've pondered the thought of what happens to us after death but, I've never thought of it like this. It is a very different way of thinking about 'the end' if you will. I couldn't find anything wrong with it and that is great. I think that this is one of the best poems I've read. I don't think that anyone could've thought of this or written as well as you did. That is a good thing... no, it's a great thing. You should keep on doing what you're doing. Keep writing and Keep getting better and you'll go very far in this world. It was a pleasure to read this work and I can't wait to read more of your works.
Thanks for the review. I plan to write a novel about this topic someday. Death is a fascinating enigma.
This is the real review can you plz delete my first comment.
Hi this is Spartan here with an amazing review so please beer with me.
First off I love the topic of this poem and as person who has died before it's kinda how you described it but so much more. The poem is so upbeat that it makes me happy to see a poem about the afterlife that ain't depressing. The poem seems like it has a few errors but I am not a grammar Nazi so I don't mind and if it doesn't that's good too. Um reincarnation economies sits but it's not fun like I have been able to see my past lives and let me tell you they are all good yet had at the same time. Reincarnation is for those who really want to try again and you have to go through something from what the big guy up stairs said.
This is Spartan 118 signing out. Keep up the good work and I hope to see another beautiful poem from you. Have a wonderful evening, day, morning, or night and thank you for letting me give you an awesome review today.
Hi this is Spartan here with an amazing review so please beer with me.
First off I love the topic of this poem and as person who has died before it's kinda how you described it but so much more. The poem is so upbeat that it makes me happy to see a poem about the afterlife that ain't depressing. The poem seems like it has a few errors but I am not a grammar Nazi so I don't mind and if it doesn't that's good too. Um reincarnation economies sits but it's not fun like I have been able to see my past lives and let me tell you they are all good yet had at the same time. Reincarnation is for those who really want to try again and you have to go through something from what the big guy up stairs said.
This is Spartan 118 signing out. Keep up the good work and I hope to see another beautiful poem from you. Have a wonderful evening, day, morning, or night and thank you for letting me give you an awesome review today.