He woke up one morning
with a fierce idea in his mind.
With great ideas came, a
host of great questions.
“Will I be able to
pull it through?”
“Am I doing something clichéd?”
The questions were bothering
him, but he followed his heart religiously,
He wrote the story
with conviction, without following any norms.
Happy with the draft
he was, he went to a publisher.
“This is my draft!” he
said and handed him his story.
“No commercial
viability!” he was told by a shrewd face.
Convinced that his idea was unique and fresh,
he went to many others
who told him, “This is crap.”
Heart-broken yet determined
he self-published his story.
Fifty one copies were
sold after fourteen days of its release,
Thirty seven out of
these were for friends and family.
Friends were asked to
pay, family paid as sympathy,
“Poor little guy,
spent three years for this drivel.”
“Enough is enough!” he
uttered and devised a cunning plan.
I shall launch this
book again but with a marketing blitzkrieg!
Critical acclaim shall
follow and sales will go up soon.
The plan was all set
up as the re-launch day was coming.
A week prior to the
launch, he sent a notice to a filmmaker.
“Your movie was plagiarized
from my highly successful book!”
A never seen before hysteria
followed as media covered this story,
‘LOOK AT THIS DIRECTOR
WHO STOLE AN IDEA WITHOUT CREDIT!!!’
The unknown book when
launched again received an unprecedented sales,
He became the
best-selling author before they realized the truth.
Then came another
masterstroke when he launched his second book,
he created another
controversy, he called someone a crook!
This someone was a
reputed businessman who shared his name with his protagonist,
The media went ablaze again, “MR.X IS ACTUALLY
A CROOOOK!!!”
The history got
repeated, the book was another blockbuster,
This ingenious
mastermind soon became a print mafia.
He developed his own
fans, he now has a huge fan-club,
Haters have a ‘parody
account’ to mock and troll his gimmicks!
Somewhere between all
this, a writer became an entrepreneur.
His book are sold like
chocolate cakes but he misses the joy of ‘writing.’
The commercial author
was once an innocent man with ideas.
The innocence faded
away somewhere as commerce won against art.
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Hi!
So I really like this. mostly because it shows the pain and struggle and haste in all of life's success. I really like this though much lIke most all of your work.
There isn't much else to say. I saw no grammar or spelling mistakes. I really like how this isn't quite long Enough to call A short story. Anyway this a really nice piece and well written As well!
Great job once again.
Keep writing!!,
~Tiff
Hi there DrFeelGood! Niteowl here to review your poem for Team Blue Moon this fine Review Day!


Overall, I like the idea behind this. It's a solid commentary on how the media sensationalizes stories and the price of success.
However, I'm not convinced the poem format is serving the story well. All the sentences are very prose-like and there's little poetic devices beyond some random and inconsistent rhyming. I agree with the previous reviewer that a more fleshed-out story would make more sense and give you more room to play with humor and satire.
Overall, there are some great ideas in this, but it doesn't feel like much of a poem. Keep writing!
Hey there, I really like this!
I think this really gets the reader thinking about what success truly is. It's a thought provoking story that embodies a greater meaning.
However I noticed you referred to your your character mostly as "he". It got quite repetitive after awhile and I think you could consider either swapping "he" for another word or even rephrase the sentences which have "he" in them.
Another thing are the caps. It's definitely an attention grabber, but it doesn't look good especially when you drag the caps on, for example "CROOOOK". You're able to convey that same sentiment of rage without using the caps, trust me. If the words are right, the mood set will be right.
Now I actually think that you could have made this into an actual story with a proper plot instead of just narrating the flow of events. Maybe you intentionally wanted it to be told this way, which is perfectly fine. There is no definite formula for a story.
The last lines:
Perhaps try to use "However" for the second line? Just to show the comparison from his innocence to his greed for fame. Also you don't have to say "won against art", just simply put "won art".
Hope this review helped!
The caps were used in a totally different way. It was a taunt on journalism, who (at least here in India), use huge caps and eye-grabbing headlines without proper research. If I get more than 2 reviewers who say caps are not looking cool, I'll change it.
And I forgot to tell you, your review was awesome! Thank you