Listen to me folks,
I’m here to tell you a message!
DO NOT exit this poem,
Or you’ll die in 13 seconds.
I am that unfortunate soul,
Who read a Facebook post!
I should have forwarded it to 9 groups,
But I was too adamant to do so.
I was told to write my crush’s name,
I wrote my plumber’s name instead.
I thought I had trolled the post,
But my death life itself became a troll.
Everyone in heaven laughs at me,
I died because I didn’t forward a post.
My sincere request to all you guys,
Please follow the steps given below.
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I’m dead
This is so fantastic !!! I literally read it 4 times its so funny! Fantastic job
I exited the poem after reading the third line. (Temporarily)
I don't have any neighbors, and if I did, I don't know how I'd get into their bathroom.
I don't have a favorite chimpanzee. (Or know the names of any.)
I suck at counting, so I couldn't shout “All hail Voldemort!” exactly 133 times even if I was held at gunpoint.
I don't have 119 groups. I don't even have one.
So, I guess I'm dead.
Hm.... Guess not, people can still see me....
So that's probably because I'm already dead or immoral so I can't die. (But seeing how I'd die anyway, meh.)
.....I mean, what?
(Tries to delete comment, but the delete button seems to have mysteriously disappeared)
LOL! Am I the only one who hates those posts?
HAHAHAHA! I might have laughed this hard in my life as I did now before, but I'm not sure.
TWO THUMBS UP to ya!
Hilarious! I get really irked by those posts saying "forward this or blah blah blah will happen to you". And the ending deserves a prize.
"Forward this poem to 199 groups and you’ll still die in the next 33 microseconds".........LOL! Please stop, I might choke.
Keep it up!
Thanks for the comment! I'm glad you liked it
I snickered out loud! This was really clever. I especially like the crossed-out "death".
Haha this made my day! It was hilarious!! XD
Haha this made my day! It was hilarious!! XD
I think you misused the word "adamant". I don't think it means what you think it means.
I know it looks slightly out of place, but I used it to maintain the rhythm.
Ghosts are cool anyway. I will defy this post and be cool.
(Joke aside, this poem was pretty funny, thanks.)
WHERE'S THE FORWARD BUTTON I WANT TO LIVEEE
There's no escape. You are dead now
D: no fair the one time I want to forward I end up dead.
Okay, so I have a deal. Share the poem on facebook/twitter. You'll be reborn next day
Crap I'm not on dFacebook or Twitter D:
Then try Quora or Linkedin
Im a caveman
Im doomed
Sorry. Cant help then. Better luck, next life
Dear DrFeelGood,
Will I die if I don't review it? jk
I knew from the name of this poem that it would be funny....heehee EccentricRose here to review your work, by the way.
hahaha The whole "Good Riddance" had me busting a gut. I think that every time I read one of those..... I've never forwarded a FB post in my life and am still alive. =p
Your plumber's name? LOL My brother is a plumber...was it his name?
I loved this poem...I'm a lover of anything humorous. Thank you for sharing this! It made this Canadian writer's day. =)
~Rose
This is funny! I like the quick, driving rhythm in the lines. The lines don't have too many syllables, so it propels you forward, which fits it being an urgent message. I think that quickness of getting out the message adds to the humor.
Even though it's humorous, it's almost like there's an underlying serious subject - how people take things on Facebook and the internet so seriously, it's like a matter of life and death to them. So the poem is kind of a neat mix of funny and commentary on a serious issue.
I didn't quite understand: "I wrote my watchman's name instead." Who is the watchman? And: "My life itself became a troll." I don't get what that means. But all in all, I think this is a brilliant poem!
Changed that line. "I wrote my plumber's name" just means he tried to troll the post, by ridiculing the post and his life got trolled when he died such a flimsy death.
Thanks for the comment. I actually wanted to give a message on this subject but I thought satirical humor could be a better way to say the same thing.
I'm very glad you noticed the message! Thanks for commenting!
You're welcome. And I get it now.
Is it cheating if you:
1. Did the neighbor's bathroom chant while you were checking on your neighbor's dog whose owner is away?
2. Shouted a random name for lack of knowledge of chimp names?
3. Screamed this outside in my backyard, where people can hear but not see me?
4. Printed a link of this poem onto a sheet of paper and pinned it to a tree outside hoping 199 groups of people see it?
Such a cheater (>.<") Clever though? I think so. Maybe?
Aaaaanyway, for the review:
I loved this poem! The title draws readers in very well, as it did for me. Good job with that! The poem itself made me laugh, and if it can't make someone else laugh I'm sure they at least had to smile. Pure genius. Those chain mail texts and emails and posts on websites always threaten you, and I was pondering whether or not to make a work about this, but seeing as you have, I thought I should see it. I'm glad I did! While it didn't quite make sense at some parts, that's fine because in the end it all came together and I understood once I got the format of the poem down. In the end, your poem was hilarious; thanks for making my day!
~Em101cats~ (From heaven, who died 33 microseconds after reading this poem)
Thanks for your lovely review, fellow ghost
You're welcome! Thanks for making my day with such an awesome poem!
*scared.
*stuck in this poem.
*like the poem.
*still not enough, though.
*33 mircoseconds latter, found dead.
*saw a ghost and as a fellow ghost.
*decided to push the follow button