hypocrisy is when you write an open letter to open letter writers,
but can’t digest their open criticism to your open letter.
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hypocrisy is when you criticize Facebook,
by writing a 1000 word essay, “How Facebook wasted my time.”
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hypocrisy is when you mock the ‘top 10 reasons fad’,
but don’t bother reading green room novels.
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hypocrisy is when offense is thrown in a whisker,
but words being tweaked is regarded a cliché.
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hypocrisy is when you write a gibberish poem on hypocrisy,
because anything against hypocrisy sells these days.
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Your poem is great, it hangs conjointly very well for a lot of random thoughts crammed together.
It's also very relatable, especially with the;
"hypocrisy is when you criticize Facebook,
by writing a 1000 word essay, “How Facebook wasted my time.”"
Your thoughts really capture how annoying and irritating it can be to have a conversation with someone and have everything they say be hypocritical. Or, you know, to pay attention to what politicians say and realize they are simply changing their opinion to fit whichever way the wind blows.
"hypocrisy is when you write a gibberish poem on hypocrisy,
because anything against hypocrisy sells these days."
This really sums up the poem nicely and in a way predicts how relatable your poem will be to your audience.
I honestly can't find any faults worth mentioning, so that's the whole review.
Please write more!
Hi! Your poem is filled with gentle irony and sarcasm. I loved it, especially the second stanza about Facebook. There were no flaws in the construction of the words as well as the grammar. The title complements the poem as it somehow conveys to the reader what the poem is about. To be frank, until the fourth stanza, I had assumed the poem to be one of the "knowlege providing" types but the last stanza (which was also my favorite) changed everything. The poem was shining with humor. Loved it!
HYPOCRITE!
this is kman134 here to review your work.
i absolutely agree with you on this take on hypocrisy; people tell you that they believe in this and that, but when you get to know them more,you realize that they do not truly mean it. the grammar is well-written and the sentences don't seem to have any problems. the spacing is great, as well, and i love how you're able to separate each sentence.
"hypocrisy is when you criticize Facebook,
by writing a 1000 word essay, “How Facebook wasted my time.”"
i can relate to this; people always complain about how Facebook had ruined their lives, shouting that it turned them into socially-awkward shut-ins, but later, you learn that they're still on the site, writing crap and doing their own thing, posting and writing about complete nonsense; it's asinine.
Anyways, despite this being gibberish, it's really moving and points out how hypocritical people are. i hope you write more.
^My favorite line.
The line is very straightforward and very funny. It adds to the irony of the overall poem.
I really enjoyed the poem, it was funny and well written. I could feel your passion in the lines as though maybe these were things you personally found annoying or that entered you mind occasionally. The repetition and structure itself made it seem more like a rant than a poem, which added to its charm.
This was a great ending and it tied everything in nicely. I'm sorry I don't have more to say but everything about the poem was very well done. What seemed like maybe a small idea in your mind turned into something thoroughly funny and interesting to read. Bravo.
Wow. I could be wrong but this poem has an angry, indignant tone to me and that's why I loved it. It's like your fed up with hypocrisy or really just the world's obsession with it. This is the first poem I've read in so long with that time. This piece has a lot of substance and I loved it for that.
I'll probably have one criticism thought this entire review but I'll start with your first stanza. I know that's the point your trying to make but I think you could replace the last "open letter" and still have the stanza mean the same thing. I loved the depiction of the word open and how that religion Kind of merged that stanza into this ongoing rant. But I think the use of "open letter" at the very end through off your flow just a tiny bit. I'd suggest something like "open mind" or "open correspondence" or "open thoughts." Lots of things would probably work. Ok, moving on.
I loved all your other stanzas. To me, your flow didn't falter once. It was really good and again I loved the subject matter. Your very last stanza was my absolute favorite. You make a pretty powerful statement at the end and I think that statement kind of makes the whole poem. This is really great. Definitely looking forward to reading more of your work.
Hi there Doc! I'm here to review your poem.
I really don't have anything to say bad about this, besides the fact that none of your lines have capitalization. Which may be your style, but I'm not here to make you change your style so, change it if you want or if not that's just okay too!
Okay, so even Word agrees with me. There is nothing really wrong with your lines, except for the capitalization. You have no spelling mistakes (YAY!) and all of your grammar is correct.
Your stanzas could be broken down into four lines, so your lines aren't so long. But once more, it's your choice and I don't want to have to tell you what to do.
I do sincerely apologize for this not being very long, I'm just not sure what else to share, but I'm hoping that what I did put helps you.
~Tulip