When I Am Free And Away From People Of This World

Hi there EagleFly! Niteowl here deciding to do just a few more reviews to get to RevMo glory!

There's some great imagery in here. I'm especially fond of "I feel like I can ride the wind" and "the dark grass shimmers with the moon's light". Even though we don't know a lot about the speaker, I can guess that he or she likes being alone and in nature. They also might be brave, as some people would be scared being outdoors alone at night, but they find this refreshing and energizing.

I think the ending could be a little stronger. It goes into some description of the emotions, but there's not as much imagery and "I can feel comforted" is not a strong ending line. Maybe instead of saying the look of the things around you brings joy and comfort, you could go with something specific that's comforting.

There's still a few spelling errors, but it looks like you've edited most of the ones previously mentioned, but the one that sticks out to me is "happens" when it should be "happiness".

Overall, I think this is a lovely poem about the joys of nature. Keep writing!

Hi EagleFly Shikora here with a review.

What I like
This poem is just lovely. It was very heart warming. I can defiantly see where your coming from when i read this. They way you write your poems is getting a lot better. So keep up the great work.

Over all mistakes

With the moons light blaze shining down on this earth.

With the moons blazing light shining down on this earth.

I can feel cum farted.

Hello Eagle! It's great to see another one of your poems.

Let's get to the review!

Interpretation

I think this poem is about a person who feels very free when they are able to be by themselves alone and just take in everything around them. You describe the feeling of being outside and just feeling the majesty and happiness of the outdoors. It's a great feeling!

Suggestions

Your spelling and grammar has been improving a ton! Keep working on it, because the progress shows. In this piece the main thing I saw was that "now won" should be "no one".

One great aspect of the poem was the nature imagery - since this poem is all about the outdoors bringing the person joy, that's a good aspect to highlight. I would have liked just a little bit more imagery though. For instance at the end you say, "with the look of things around me" and I think it'd be more effective to actually describe everything around the speaker - the grass, the trees, the feeling of the ground under their toes etc.

I didn't quite get the first 4 lines' connection with the rest of the poem. What does being lonely or alone have to do with the outdoors? Could you make that connection a bit clearer?

Praise & Overall Impressions

I am very pleased to see you using figurative language in this poem - they make a poem come alive and give an extra layer of meaning. There was this one:

I feel like I can ride the wind

Hello hello

This is Wandering lost cloud, happy to be back in action, yay...
So, I will not go into technical aspects of the prose too much, but maybe I can help with 'delivery'.

I do think that the poem was written carelessly. I apologize if I don't get the term right, (am not accurate English language) but what I mean is that, it felt like 'meh'. No rhyme, no rhythm. Like it was written just because it needs to get out. That is good actually but it has to have some sort of flow, yeah, that's it. Let me get into some detail,

First 6 (six) sentences look simple and understandable (I admit that I also felt related with those lines, I am too an introvert).

2nd sentence "There is now won here right now."
I don't know if you're South Korean, and "won" was intended but I don't see any relation to it actually. So I assume it must have meant "victory" of some sort. Or it might be just a typographic error... "There is now won -> (no one) here right now."

Then, out of nowhere, you just turned to a poetic scenery, a deep one on the 7th sentence. I guess it was inserted in an attempt to add "poetic" lines. I do think it failed to connect with the sentences before it.

To sum it all up, the mood was set in the first 6 sentences but lacked the control and impact of flow on the preceding sentences.

Hope you have a good day~

May the writing power be with you always. Wandering Cloud is checking out

Hey, there, EagleFly!!

This is Eros here with a review for you!!

I really liked this poem and I can relate it to myself. The real life is so busy and full of hic tick schedules and we just need a break from this busy life, around people. I like the first line itself, where it gives the poem a feeling as if you are making sure if anyone's around.
However, a few nitpicks:

There is now won here right now.

When there is no won about,