​A Mental Push And One Cut

firstly, as a person who struggles with self harm, the lines - 'mental to physical pain' and 'to unfeeling and numb to the touch' - touched a part of my heart i did not know existed. so first and foremost, i want to tell you that it gets better.

now, coming to the poem itself, i like that it is in freeverse. it kind of indicates the raw nature of human emotion, how feelings, especially those of hurt and pain, come so messily and harshly. this poem feels deep, and filled to the brim with strong emotions. the line - 'it disgusts me and makes me want to run' - is such a simple yet beautiful way to portray the agonizing feeling of wanting to leave.

i absolutely loved it.

I love when a poem has such raw unfiltered feelings in it to the point where you can feel them radiating off the poem. This poem is really well written, and I understand what it is like to be in this place. "Mental to physical pain" this line is so relatable in many ways and to many people. "this wasn't the only time I gave you this chance

but this wasn't the only time that you'd thrown me down," it is always the worst feeling when you keep giving someone chances but you repeatedly give them chances to redeem themselves and they never do. You know you shouldn't but you cant bring yourself to do so. Writing is such a good way to healthily get your feelings out and I'm happy you are choosing to. Please keep writing.

You really wrote your heart out on this one. I admire deep poetry such as this. The deprivation of a connection can lead two people to feel as strangers. Keep your head up. I know it's hard, and I can tell this writing comes from a dark place. The sun always shines again, so keep fighting and dont give up. Kudos on pouring your heart out, and I hope writing this at least helped.

This is a very deep poem and as someone who was in a place like this once, it feels very emotional.

I love deep poems like this because I don't need to write a review for them. They are fine just the way they are. I can't tell you not to write something like this because I have no say in something deep like this. The most beautiful poems I read are often the sadder ones.

You said you don't know what to rate this. I'd think it'd be at least a 12+, at most a 16+. It does have some heavy topics sprinkled in, but it isn't so obvious that it needs a very high maturity rating.

Also, on your line "like glass I kept braking and being replaced", I'm pretty sure braking is supposed to be breaking, but if not just ignore this part.

I think this was a nice poem and I don't think I can recommend any changes. This was a nice poem, and I really liked it.

Just keep up the good work!