This poem is quite something. I say this because every stanza, and the content as a whole has a very insightful deeper meaning to things.
Content wise, it's very clear that you discuss the end of your life, while dawn is giving rise to new life and others another chance. This concept was effectively conveyed to me. As I see it, I get the impression that this is some sort of suicide attempt - with reference to the content in the third stanza.
Grammar and Spelling wise, you've taken good care of your writing. Special attention has been given here, and it has very well paid off in the end.
Structure wise, you've organized your content into equal stanzas of five lines. Last stanza with six lines is significant as it is the concluding section of the poem - this significance adds emphasis towards the dramatic effect you try to create, about someone departing this life.
The content is coherent, no doubt about it. I feel it's quite jumping all of a sudden from describing life, to death - that too with knife in hand. It seems quite un-natural in a way, because normally you would expect natural death to be conveyed in such a way. Nevertheless, it seems quite reasonable for this case.
Literary usage has been used effectively too. I am able to identify metaphors, adjectives, and personification.
My personal rating for this work is 4.2/5
I shall add a "like" since your work got above 80% from me
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