I liked how short you kept each line. It looked very neat!
I like how concise each line is, which helped me keep a flowing rhythm going while I read through the poem. Though no specific characters have been referred to in the poem , but stillI I could really feel a familiar pang of heartache there. A sort of craving and longing many of us have in the absence of loved ones.
Both the opening and closing lines contained the ' just a kiss' but I could sense a change of mood there which was interesting. Overall, I really enjoyed it.
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