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first i'd like to tell you that this line holds no apparent sense to the reader
"What does hope mean to
Someone who's forgotten it?"
because people do not "forget hope",the lose it , as i can see you've tried to keep the poem straight and simple, thus keeping that in mind i'd suggest you to change that line to :
"what does hope mean to someone who's lost it"
considering that it is the opening line, i strongly advise you to change it, and in contrast to this i'd also like to tell you that the end is perfect.it is very expressive.
i "hope" this was helpful
I like the form in which you wrote this poem. I do have to disagree, however, with the meaning.
I think that we are all loved; loved enough to be given life. And, because we are all loved, we all have the capacity to love. I also think that love has the power to heal, even though it is so often the source of pain.
Hope is something easily forgotten, but it can also be sooo powerful if one tries not to lose sight of it. Hope keeps us going even when we feel down. Being hopeful means looking back and seeing all the good things that have happened to us, and gaining confidence that our future will be taken care of just as our past was.
Hope this helped,
This poem was very simple, and while I do like simple poems, this was simple to the point of being simplistic, which isn't good. Poetry, in order to really be good, needs to be memorable, and right now, there's nothing memorable about this poem at the moment. It's rather general, and while you've got an idea here, ideas are not very individualized or unique in and of themselves.
One way to really make an idea unique is to tie it to a specific situation or observation. So hope is meaningless to someone who's forgotten it? Show us a person who has forgotten hope and so finds hope meaningless. Show us exactly how hopeless that person is, and exactly how useless hope is to that person. If you can show us a situation as clear and specific as a painting or photograph, then people will be more likely to remember your poem, and they'll be more likely to remember the meaning of your poem, by extension.
One of the other major issues of this poem was the line breaks. The words you begin and end on are slightly more emphasized than the words in the middle of the lines, and so ending on a word or starting a new line with a different one changes how your poem is read. It also changes the meaning.
Right now, ending on "to" really sounds and feels awkward. It puts a lot of emphasis on "to", and it's not a good emphasis. It's like reading "What does hope mean to someone who's forgotten it?", and it doesn't make sense to have so much emphasis on the "to". Breaking the line at "mean" or even "someone" would make much more sense, and would put more emphasis on the meaning of those words.
Line breaks are tricky beasties, and the best way to figure them out is to play around with them, try a bunch of variations, and see how they change the reading (and meaning) of your poem.
If you can incorporate more vivid, specific images/events/instances into your poetry and nail those line breaks, your poetry will be much stronger and more memorable for it. You've got ideas; it's just a matter of showing them in ways that people will remember and really receive.