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These are really nice, great job! In the first poem I like the line about being "scolded by ink". The haikus (is haiku plural "haikus"?) also had great imagery and each had an interesting thought. In the "heavy season" I might change "air or breath" to touch or something different because "air" and "breath" are basically the same thing. I'm not really sure about the last line in "It's been a while" too, the rest was nice so I might re-think the last line so you dont waste it. I didn't see any spelling mistakes and the punctuation all looked good to me.
Thanks for sharing your poems, I enjoyed reading them.
~~Ally-wa
My favorite would probably be It's Been a While and my least favorite Silly Human because it doesn't really have any imagery in it and it needs more detail, even though the theme of Silly Human is probably my favorite.