Trace her tongues all day, if you can.
Run your fingertips along twitching, non-static lines
that snap! at every wrong flinch and leave ash to mark of her rage.
Allow her to comfort you, when there are only outlines of the dust in an hourglass,
disintegrating as they are suffocating and sliding below in a fluid taunt.
Tame his heart all night, if you hold the resolve to match it.
Bright with energy, drawing our deepest pleas from any vein strong enough to siphon it,
reaching hues and evolutions we never prophesized but now observe and wish to simplify -
into words which cannot handle a certainty nor theory of their own
Since when have they become so obsolete?
Eat it, if you wish to care
but do not let it devour you, and your feral instinct for wind.
Follow the echo of a smile (that guides the beasts), and the bats
that lead the wing beats clipping your ear as they head for nascent rapture–
visibly absent and in need of breath, to defile the air so it can be made real again.
and seal the wraith, in strokes firm and wide with watercolor tears,
minus the oxygen and hydrogen,
divided by zero,
and the expectation of friction.
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Hello Daisuki! I'm here, as requested!
And as this is something you want interpretations for, I would like to start off with mine. But please take it with a grain of salt. Its the opinion I got from reading it without knowing I was supposed to have an opinion xD.
In any case, this sounded extremely.. well, sexual. It was heavy on the touching sensations and on what one feels rather than one sees. And its sort of.. dark, in that sense. Very angry. Very impassioned. Like a physical relationship rather than an emotional one. And its very, very physical.
That being said, as its not really pointing in any which direction, I'm not quite sure if I like this, but I know that I don't hate it. You use your wording well and to your advantage, and though this appears to be on the more physical side of things, its emotionally stirring, which is nice.
So yeah, I'm not quite sure how to critique this now xD. Most of my reviews are based on content. I love the wording but words without meaning can often be brutal, temperate things.
~Walker
My friend read this, and I thought his interpretation was cool, so here is what he said:
Yep, my friend's pretty awesome.