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Hi Bhavya!

This is a nice message and something very relatable. Most of us define our lives by the judgments and beliefs that other people have about us. You said correctly that a quiet introspection about our lives can give a lot answers about this problem. I agree with the puppet thing too. Life isn't being the puppet or the slave of the choices and desires of others.

Getting recognition in the eyes of others makes us feel worthy and when the same people don't appreciate us, we feel low and inferior. I really don't know how to give a positive reply to this because deep down I know I too am not able to cope up with these things. The fear of 'others' always haunts me, no matter how much I try to avoid. This fear stays inside me and eats me like a demon.

The comparison that you did in the end with the moon and the sun was very nice and I loved it. It is really difficult to find our potential especially when there's so much of self-doubt. It's easier to say or recommend than to actually do it. So sometimes writing it like this does help to some extend.

There were some technical issues and improvements but they were very well covered by watchamacallit in her review so there's no point in repeating them. It's always nice to see some honest thoughts and writings on YWS. It always gives a feeling that we are not the only one's facing the problem.

Good luck for future works!
Keep writing

Hi there BhavyaMehta! I saw this sweet piece of writing in the green room so here I am for a review

I think this is a really lovely, inspirational message, and I have absolutely nothing to critique about the subject or content. I especially enjoyed your closing paragraph about the sun and moon ~ some very poetic outer space descriptions there, which I'm a sucker for!

That being said, in a couple of places the grammar and flow could be improved a little. For example, let's take the opening three sentences:

If people, their opinions and attention. If the thing which matters to you the most is " others" then you need to introspect your ways. Then you need to think about your position in life.

And in this you will realize that if people govern your life then you are no less than a puppet.

Why? Because you never feel yourself as worthy.

You can feel loved if they love you but you can't be dependent on them for that love. You need to nurture that self love within you. If people define you better than you then you really need to introspect.

I realized this a month ago and to all the youngsters like me who just limit themselves because of their belief and what others think of them.

Remember you are the shining moon in the sky. Which is lovely and stunning besides all its flaws. Be that moon who is no less or no more than the sun and who believes in the power of its beauty.

Hey, Dakota here!!

This is what people need!! Its so beautifully written and worded so carefully.

As well as linking it to personal prospects!! Ithink this is amazing, this is exactly what younger generations need to hear in a time like this.

The language and the sincerity in the words it gives off so much calmness and reassurance.

Keep doing what you’re doing, i cant wait to read more!!