They say, "It's good to be eager,"
But then, "You run before you think."
They say, "It's good to be strong,"
But then, "You force away all love."
They say, "It's good to stop and smell the roses,"
But then, "You get distracted."
They say, "It's good to listen well,"
But then, "You eavesdrop."
They say, "It's good to have feelings,"
But then, "You overreact."
They say, "It's good to be helpful,"
But then, "You are too independent."
So how am I supposed to be good
If being good is so bad?
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HI there,
HappySmiles here to review!
Very well written! I really like how you have explained that being perfect for a human is impossible. How being good is so hard and being bad is so easy! But in this poem I personal like how you did not leave the reader depressed, but instead seemed to catch the reader in the warm palm of your hand! Leaving the reader with a question that every human should ask them selves, and the answer for that human should and always be a answer that brings a little more hope to there life! Showing that us humans are just beautiful messes, in need of love and hope! I really did not see any grammar errors! Again very well written, and keep up the good work!
Thanks so much!
Hi! Dogsrule5 here to review!
First of all I thought this poem is really good. I really liked it, and I liked the tune. It kind of sounded like a song. Maybe one day it will be. Keep up the good work.
Grammar. I thought your grammar was really great, it was good.
I really didn't see any mistakes.
Great job.
This was one of the best poems I have ever read. Good job!
Talk to you later,
Love,
Dogsrule5
Thanks, dogsrule5!
No problem. I mean what are friends for!!!
I think you just described how every teenager feels. Good job. Poetry at its prime. LOVED IT!!!
Thanks!
Hello, Em101cats!
Hmm... Yes... This is a very interesting piece! It is also so easy to relate to it. Like, sometimes my parents tell me to do something, and I do it, but I do it wrong. It's so frustrating!
I like the repetition, of "They say its good to _____". Well done with that!
Hmm, I agree with thewriter13. Something to spice this up may be good. Maybe a simple metaphor or something, but then that would kind of take away the repetition maybe. Just something to make this spicier. xD
The last two lines really gave me something to think about. Especially the last one, which I had to just think about for a second to understand it.
There's just one problem about them, though.
They just don't sound very good together. :/ I think you should change it to this:
So how am I supposed to be good
If being good is so bad?
See? Also, I think you meant good, not bad, on that first line. Or maybe I'm just being stupid right now. 0.0
Anyways, great poem, thanks for writing this so I was able to relate to it!
~WillowPaw1~
Good, bad, so, sad, what? IMMA CONFUSED LOL
What. 0.0
xD
You're right, that last line sounded a little bit odd, so I edited it to sound different. I'll think of something soon to spice things up a bit as you and @Thewriter13 said
Cool
Cool B)
This is really good. I will do my major review on it later though. Well talk to you later.
Thanks! Can't wait for the review. Talk to you later!
Okay I will write it soon!
Hi Em101cats! It's Thewriter13 here to review your poem.
Great work!
Very thought provoking, I must say. It really made me question all the things people tell me, such as "Stop and smell the roses" or "have feelings."
Can you explain to me this line:
"They say it's good to be helpful,
But then I get too independent." Because I don't think one gets independent from being too helpful...I mean just because one is helpful doesn't mean they can't have others help them. I'm not saying to change the line but I was just confused by that (ya know because I'm weird like that)
anyway not much critique...the rhythm was good, the layout of the poem is fine.
I enjoyed this piece very much, but I think you should add more to it.
Spice it up...it seems to be missing something. Perhaps add more descriptive words? I'm not sure; the word choice is fine but I have a feeling you could you use bigger and more descriptive words.
But no matter, there's no need to change it if you don't want to.
The last line had me thinking a lot after I finished rereading the poem. Who says being good is bad?
The last line is just perfect because I really like poems that keep me thinking. I'm still repeating the question you put in the poem!
Keep writing
Thanks! Helping others too much makes you feel like you don't need help, making you stubborn. Not everybody experiences this, but the character speaking feels this way. Thanks for the bigger descriptive words suggestion, I wasn't quite thinking. I was randomly walking around outside and this song came into my head, and I made up these words and it became a lyrical song/poem, and I didn't revise and edit it enough. The being good is bad thing is about people yelling about the second line of every two lines whenever they tell her the first line of every second line. Does that make sense?
Thanks for the review! Have been meaning to follow you. I finally did. 
Oh my gosh I had to reread that line a few times...I think I understand it (I'm not a genius lol)
And why I haven't I been following you? *facepalm*
Everybody's a genius, whether they have small breakthroughs or humongous ideas. And thanks for the review! I'll try to revise it as your review suggests
dats so sweet :3