Hello~ Gummy's my name, reviewing is my game!
I've camped out in the woods before, so I can confidently say that I really grasped the feeling expressed when the poem mentions "the lights from above [that] say heaven is here". In my case, it reminded me of the rays of sunrise that seep through the branches and pour down onto the earth below like spotlights. c:
I love how you refer to the woods as a sort of paradise or refuge. The entire poem is like an antithesis to the stereotypical view of the "creepy, haunted woods" that you often see in many forms of media. Anyway, the grammar and punctuation flow very cleanly, save for the aforementioned comma in Line 9, and I congratulate you for this regardless, because this is a very nice work. It could be a little longer, though, but that's just me. I'm more of a fan of twenty-to-forty-line poems. But, hey, if that's your style, you're better off sticking to it! If you remember to stay true to yourself, you'll go far in the writing world.
As always, keep writing, and keep raising the bar while you're at it! This is Gummy, signing out.
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