"Foul, mindless shadow.
You broke my father.
He nearly broke me,
yet he was kind; you were not."
There should be another comma between mindless and shadow.
The commas and periods seem to be confused.
"Foul, mindless shadow.
You broke my father,
He nearly broke me.
Yet, he was kind; you were not."
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Alas, I will not be broken.
Sometimes,
my hands shake.
There is too much of him in me.
Sometimes,
my faith is shaken.
There is too little of him in me."
This is perfect and powerful PLEASE do not change a thing about this!
" I wish to forget those bouts" I don't know if you meant bouts or doubts.
This was very powerful to me. I don't know what angle you're coming from but I myself lost my Uncle a few years ago. He was like a father to me. My own dad and I are now okay but back the. My uncle was my best friend and father like figure. He died of alcoholism. It is something that runs in my family and I fear all the time I will end up like them. I want to be as happy as he was but he might have not have been so happy. I have even suspected he might have been abusive towards my aunt, which I never would have thought about if it wasn't for some recent events. I am wondering if this man I loved so much could be a lie and I don't know what side I want to believe in. I think of him when I read this.
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I don't know what to believe anymore but this was comforting in ways that maybe it shouldn't have been. I feel the need to thank you.
Thank you.
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