Fuzzy Wuzzy was a bear
Fuzzy Wuzzy had no hair
Fuzzy Wuzzy wasn't fuzzy
Was he?
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He used to smile
He used to run
He played in light
He chased the sun
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Then came the snow
Then came the night
The warmth was gone
The world lost light
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His fur fell out
No one asked why
He stayed alone
He didn’t cry
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They sang his name
They made a joke
He laughed along
But slowly broke
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He walked the woods
No one came near
He whispered low
No one could hear
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He missed the touch
He missed the sound
Of friendly paws
Of solid ground
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He curled up tight
Beneath the tree
And asked the wind
"Do you see me?"
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What the frick frack Hop? I thought you actually wrote a happy poem. Into the review.
jhhxnfdlexncgyfudsskn STOP! Fuzzy Wuzzy did not deserve this. The poem is emotional and disguised as a fictional story about a bear. I was surprised when I started reading and found myself with tears in my eyes. Thanks a lot Hop! You and your talented... writing, frick I can't insult you. You are so talented and amazing and wwfhcdbfrbffhbd
Your poems are so good, and I fricking can't.
"They sang his name
They made a joke
He laughed along
But slowly broke"
My favorite part of the poem, him pretending he's okay with the teasing but inside he hates it (that's what I picked up). Fuzzy Wuzzy did not deserve this. You are so amazing and talented, keep up the great work. Mwah Mwah
-STARRYY
Lol thank you! Sorry for making you tear up!
Hello, I am here to write a review. (Sorry if i'm bad at this, this is my 1st review). I loved this poem and the new take on the nursery rhyme. It added a new depth to it that I loved. The new emotion given to Fuzzy Wuzzy made the story engaging and interesting. The rhythm of the poem helps it flow easily and makes it fun to read. You are such a talented writer and I had no criticism for this piece. I loved this poem and am so exited to see what you come up with next. Amazing job bestie!
I made it different.
Hello, I am here to write a review. (Sorry if i'm bad at this, this is my 1st review). I loved this poem and the new take on the nursery rhyme. I loved the rhythm of the poem and how easily it flows. You are such a talented writer and I had no criticism for this piece.
Sorry about the doubles I am still new to YWS.
Hello, I am here to write a review. (Sorry if i'm bad at this, this is my 1st review). I loved this poem and the new take on the nursery rhyme. You took it and made it have a darker meaning. The part we really don't look into. I really felt Fuzzy Wuzzy's point of view on this. Good job. I loved the rhythm of the poem and how easily it flows. You are such a talented writer and I had no criticism for this piece. It is truly amazing, within and without. Amazing job! I'm pround of you AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Love,
KitKatz
Hello, I am here to write a review. (Sorry if i'm bad at this, this is my 1st review). I loved this poem and the new take on the nursery rhyme. I loved the rhythm of the poem and how easily it flows. You are such a talented writer and I had no criticism for this piece.
Wow, this was beautiful but also heartbreaking. The “laughed along but slowly broke” line really stuck with block blast. Did you mean for Fuzzy Wuzzy to reflect more of a human struggle?
Yes! I was basing it off of a children's rhyme! I realized that it was kind of sad and making fun of him so I decided to make a poem about it!
Hi Hop! Milesperhour here, to review your very-cool-not-cute-at-all poem!
Ok, in all seriousness, this is amazing! I like how you took a children's rhyme and flipped it on its head, we often don't think about how disturbing they are if you think about the actual implications behind them! Also I like that you used this rhyme in particular, as I honestly forgot it existed and this was a nice reminder of my childhood. (I actually have a stuffed bear named Fuzzy Wuzzy!)
I also like how this really embodies how cruel people can be, and how sometimes people will turn something a person may be insecure about into a joke without realizing how it's hurting them.
Overall, no criticisms for this one, it's really impressive how quickly your poetry is improving!
-Milesperhour133
Thank you got your review! It means a lot! Also, I'm glad you don't see me as cute! (Finally someone on my side)
Hey, cutie! <3
This is Alex, back with a review on yet another one of your fabulous works. Let's dive right in!
I believe this poem was an extended metaphor, which quite subtly delivers its message. The title describes the protagonist, a classic way which you could never go wrong with.
Love the unexpected irony! It's amusing to see the character betrays its name, in a rather comical way. It reminds me of a satirical take I had read about people not always being what they look like, fascinating indeed!
The tense really caught my attention here! It almost sounds like you're intentionally trying to give us a flashback of its life before, to make the contrasting current state even more impactful. A clever plan, indeed. The last line particularly called out to me as I think it's suggestive. To 'chase the Sun' means to follow one's dreams to one's maximal capability. I think it does a really good job of portraying the bear's aspirations and enthusiasm.
The phrasing of this shift was really striking to read! The snow paints such a different scene than the bright sun, the change of the time is so vividly depicted. Kudos to you!
It feels like the magic of his aura is gone- his fur, it's sense of identity. I believe this was an ode to mental health struggles and loneliness, and you did the theme justice.
A very accurate representation of social bullying right here. The character puts on a nonchalant face, but is deeply broken inside by the mocking remarks. You capture it very well, I'm totally impressed.
So heartbreaking to see that the bear has been abandoned and now lives an lonely life. The lack of company has it asking the wind for validation of its existence. Such a unique scene to illustrate it. All it wants, is to be seen and even this tiny ask not being fulfilled makes its pain appear so much more strong. If I were you, I'd switch the second 'of' with 'and' as it sounds much more appealing instead of duplicative. But otherwise, impeccable closing!
Overall, this poem was a great symbolism of social isolation in a light tone-such an original blend. This piece genuinely felt like it belonged in a children's book, which often hide a deeper meaning in them. A shattering read, it was my pleasure to review it for you. Hope I get to read more from you very soon.