I don't understand.

WHY IS IT SO GOOD IF IT IS YOUR FIRST POEM LIKE WHAT THE!? First of all, I absolutely adore the rhyming and syllable pattern, I can picture it as a rap or a song or smthing. It has truth in the words that it says, the question at the end is relatable, and it explains the pains of not showing our true selves just because we're afraid of getting bullied or made fun of. I love how every sentence starts with I don't understand, because I don't understand either! People can be what they want to be, they should be able to say what they are without being judged. HOW DID YOU MAKE IT RHYME LIKE SO GOOD. Like, maybe change it into a RAP or something, my brain was just rappin it out, word with beat. It's CRAZY good for a first, maybe you can be a poet! Your work clearly shows it! It doesn't hurt, to try it! Keep writing my friend, you're not at an end, a pleasure to read, you are fit to lead!
Love,
CATS

I DON'T UNDERSTAND EITHER!! This is written so well ahhhhhhhh. Absolutely agree with everything you're saying too; none of this is fair! The rhyming is done incredibly well too, ESPECIALLY for a first poem! It isn't just random words but things that fit with the poem and make sense to be there while making it a satisfying, truthful read. I love this Hop <3

Your poem is honest, powerful, and full of heart. The way you repeat “I don’t understand” makes each line feel stronger. You talk about big problems — racism, unfair treatment, money, gender, and freedom — in a way that’s easy to feel and hard to ignore.
Even though the words are simple, the message is deep. You’re asking questions that many people think about but don’t always say out loud. That takes courage. The last line really hits hard: “If free were really the word, why can’t I be me?” It sums up the whole poem in one strong thought. I overall think that this is an amazing poem.
Each line brings up something real and painful. You talk about how people are judged for their race, their money, their identity, and their beliefs. You ask why things are unfair, and you don’t pretend to have all the answers. That honesty makes the poem strong.
The part about “my body my choices” and women’s voices is especially powerful. It shows how people are still fighting to be seen and heard. And the last line — “If free were really the word, why can’t I be me?” — is the perfect ending. It wraps up everything you said in one clear, emotional question.
reader stop and think.
And the last line — “If free were really the word, why can’t I be me?” — is the perfect ending. It wraps up everything you said in one clear, emotional question that stays with you.
I know this poem really resonated with me because I sometimes question my sexuality. I like girls but then my mom only wants me to like boys. Also, I always question, 'why do they call it America, if we can't be our free American selves?

Hi, it's me, Miles, here to review this incredible poem! I usually don't review poetry (since I'm really bad at it lol), but this is really great so I decided to give it a shot!

First of all, I love the repeated phrase of "I don't understand." It kind of gives me the vibe of like, how a childish or "naive" view of the world can often be the most wise, and the importance of questioning things that have been widely accepted. (I hope that makes sense lol). From what you write about, I can tell we'd agree on a lot of things

There's not much to critique here, this is incredibly impressive for a first poem! However, while most of the rhyming is incredibly effective and impactful, some of it sounds a bit forced. For example I wasn't really sure what "How being gay means you're unseated" meant, and the "eight year old human" line seems a bit strangely worded (though it's very true lol).

Overall, I can't believe this is your first poem, this is amazing and you should definitely continue on your poetry journey!

- Milesperhour133

PS sorry if I repeated something someone else already said, there are so many reviews already and i didn't have time to read them all lol

Happy review month my amazing and beautiful bestie Hop! I'm not great at writing reviews but I will try! :] Into the review!
THIS IS YOUR FIRST POEM WHAT??? This is amazing ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! I'm so proud Hop. from a political lens I can tell there's a lot we agree on, but such is life. This is an amazing poem. the verses flow so nicely, and they rhyme well. I genuinely cannot believe that this is your first poem. you are so talented and amazing! Anyway, this is perfection, keep up the great work. Mwah mwah
your bestie,
STARRYY

Hi.

So you mentioned this is your first poem, which is interesting. From a political lens, I can already tell that there’s a lot we wouldn’t agree on, but such is life. It’s still a good poem. Nicely written. I like the theme, with your repetition of “I don’t understand.” The final line where you mention it’s your first poem, since it read as part OF the poem, caught me a little off guard. I’ve seen that in a few poems I’ve reviewed now though, so I’m guessing maybe it’s some kinda formatting bug? Either way, nothing wrong with the poem itself.

Pretty good. Nice job 👍🏻

Hey, Hop! This is Alex. Happy Review day, yours is one of the works I chose for a review today. Seeing it's your first poem, let me share my thoughts on it.

Wow, for someone's first poetry, colour me impressed. It explores the hypocrisy of the human race in such a gentle way, almost making it out down its head in shame. It doesn't demean the wrongdoing, just gently questions why it's done out of a naive curiousity, such a creative idea to come up with. It's powerful despite being subtle, and that's not something I see very often.

The title is pretty apt considering it's the line that is repeated throughout the poem. I feel it adds a subtle rhythm to the work, an unexpected bonus.

Why one person can look at another,
And say they are different from the next,

Why people are always discriminated against,

Why race depends on how you're treated,

Why rich people have to work less,

Why a man can't be a woman
But a president can be an 8-year-old human,

Why there isn't free health,
What this meaning is that they call 'free'
If free were really the word, why can't I be me?

Heya, there, Hop!!! Avi here with a quick review

I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Before I start, I just want to say that I've been low-key getting into raps and writing some of my own lately, and this totally has the rhythm and feel of a rap. Like, if you were to drop a beat or a few alternating chords behind it, it could be something I hear on the radio.

Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
This is a poem with which I resonate deeply. This poem is also pretty political, but that's part of the beauty of words-- they're an outlet and an art form and a way to speak up and out.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
There are a few parts that I didn't quite understand or at least was written in a confusing manner, and it might just be me, but if you could elaborate, I'd like that ^v^
- "I don't understand
What this meaning is that they call 'free'
If free were really the word, why can't I be me?"
I interpreted it as something along the lines of "they call this freedom, but I always thought freedom meant the leniency to be myself". If I'd written it, I probably would have written it as:
"I don't understand
The meaning of their version of 'free'
If free was really the word, why can't I be me?"
- "I don't understand
How being gay means you're unseated,"
Does this mean not being given a seat of power?
Then there were just a few parts that I thought were punctuation things. For example, I felt like most of the commas at the ends of the lines could be replaced with periods or deleted.
- In
"I don't understand
Why there's no more my body my choices,",
I think it would be cool if it was
"I don't understand
Why there's no more "my body, my choices","

Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
There are several parts in this poem that just made me go, "Say it, girl!"
- "I don't understand
Why having less money means you're worthless,
I don't understand
Why rich people have to work less,"
- "I don't understand
Why there can't be more than one religion,
I don't understand
How truth has lost its precision,"
- "I don't understand
Why there's no more my body my choices,
I don't understand
Why women can't have their own voices,"
- "I don't understand
Why pain must hide itself,"
- "I don't understand
Why there isn't free health,"

Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
All in all, this is a pretty darn good poem, especially for it being your first one, so great job!!!

Up coming Shakespeare. Nice one bro.

I can rate that 100/10.
That poem was so good at first I thought it was a story when the perfect rhyming came to the rescue.