Emperor's Heir - Chapter 24

by shieldmaiden

Published August 7, 2019

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In Emperor's Heir

Chapter 24

Nalda shrieked when she saw us and had baths run up immediately. Two manservants grabbed hold of Iyagi while Nalda took me by the arm, pulling the two of us apart into separate rooms. Once settled in the tub, the old woman devoted her attention to me, scrubbing my back furiously and saving no time in giving long lectures which were filled with scores of exclamations.

How many baths do you need child!?” She cried once. “Really! This makes two today!”

Four,” I muttered back, thinking of my showers under the waterfall and the unexpected dunking in the pool.

What?”

Nothing,” I replied quickly, sinking deeper into the tub to blow bubbles.

Hmph!” Nalda huffed, grabbing a comb and pulling it through my hair, non-too-gently, causing me to wince. Once dried and dressed, the older maid then sent me to bed without supper. She stopped me from protesting by holding up her finger.

If you cannot stay clean and behave as a grown woman should,” she said, wagging the finger in my face, “then you shall be treated like a child until you prove otherwise.”

And then, Nalda shut the door in my face and I was left all alone in my room with my rumbling, growling stomach. However, I didn’t mind that much. I had other mysteries to occupy my mind. Namely – how to unlock the spell of a certain memoir.

Diving under the bed, I searched among the cobwebs and dust for the book. My fingers grasped at the thread worn cover and eagerly tugged it out from its hiding place. Hugging it to my chest I felt as if I was carrying a piece of my mother in my arms. Since it was her mother who wrote in these pages, I hoped to uncover a bit about my own. I opened it, only to again be met with bare sheets.

”’Name of blood’” I quoted. The key lay in the message. I knew it.

At that moment there was a soft knock at the door. Going to it, I whispered, “Who is it?”

It’s Iyagi,” came a return whisper back.

I opened the door a crack and a plate of rolls met my eyes behind a grinning prince’s face.

I happened to overhear Nalda send you to your room without eating,” he said, “so I thought I would try and smuggle you what I could.”

I took the plate and inhaled the warm scent of the rolls. “Thank you!” I breathed out gratefully, “I hope you didn’t get caught.”

Iyagi shook his head. “Usan stood guard and was the distraction in case Nalda came our way. Oh, and I brought you something else.” The prince dug into the folds of his robe and took out a piece of paper which he held out for me to take. “It’s a message from the Emperor. He told me to give it to you at the soonest opportunity.”

I put the rolls down and took the paper. “Why didn’t Father give it to me himself?” I pondered quietly.

Iyagi smiled softly. “He knew you were going to wonder why. His Majesty told me to tell you that you would understand once you read what’s inside.”

I nodded silently. “Thank you.”

Good night,” he whispered back before walking stealthily away on tiptoe.

Closing the door, I broke the red seal of wax and opened the folded paper. There were several pages. The writing was a little faded, but the hand was clear and precise, written in confident deft strokes.

It was from my mother.

My dear Avacë,

If your father has given this to you it means that I am no longer alive. If so, my darling, I am very sorry! There is so much I have to say and so many questions I wish to ask. How old are you? What are your hopes and dreams? Did you marry a good man? And most importantly – are you happy? I miss you so much and long to be by your side every moment I am gone. We always had such glorious adventures together, just the two of us. But I promise you, that even though I am gone, I shall always be watching over you. And if you need me, I will be there.

But my dear, I write this note not merely for a sentiment. There is a great danger that is being released into the world. And I’m afraid it comes from our secret place – Quonxi. We both loved this land dearly and you know as well as I that so many beautiful things were created there. But there is also a great darkness. Your Grandmother discovered it first.

Her tribe, the Kacheinagh, was a proud nation. The women were especially gifted. A secret power was always bestowed upon the eldest daughter of the chieftain, coming from their ancient ancestor, who was given it by the Heavens as reward for a great sacrifice she made at the beginning of the world. Descended from mother to daughter throughout the ages, a long-lasting legacy was created. Once the daughter was born, the power faded from the mother. Yet, this special gift always proved to be different with its new owner.

When your Grandmother was born, the moon shone as bright as the sun. Moments after, there was a strange sound that history records as a loud creak. I imagine that a mighty hand had opened a special door that night. You know what door I mean. A portal was created that led to the land of Quonxi. And from that door, magic poured through. Slowly, strange mystical creatures began appearing throughout the entire Empire of Geodaehan. Some people were afraid. But others accepted them and bonded with the Quonxinites. For years, all was peaceful.

Then the darkness appeared.

They called themselves the White Winter Warlocks. Their hair was of ashen snow, their lips as blue as ice, and their eyes as black as their souls. They fed upon flesh for food and blood for drink. And they performed dark arts. No one noticed at first. But as they grew stronger in our beloved Empire, their power grew. People began losing their reason – going mad. Like an epidemic, father turned on son, mother on daughter, husband on wife. No on was safe, even with those they held most dear to their heart. The warlocks were harvesting souls.

It was your Grandmother who discovered the cause. Using all the power she possessed, she banished those evil witches from Geodaehan and locked them all back in Quonxi, on the highest peak of the highest mountain. But the spell taxed her strength and sent her into premature labor. She died giving birth to me.

Your Grandfather, my father, told me her story before he passed when I was still very young. I should have told you as soon as you could speak. But I was afraid. The darkness was unraveling, seeping back into our world. And I knew that one day you would have to defeat it. For you, my darling, are the next Chieftain’s Daughter. A great power rests in your body, transferred from mine when you were born. And should you have a little girl of your own someday, it will pass onto her.

I end this note with a bode of warning. The White Winter Warlocks have only been stayed, not ended. They will return with a vengeance and must be defeated. I fear that that great responsibility rests upon your shoulders, my child. I know not how, but I trust my Avacë will find a way. You always did. Before your Grandmother died, she received a vision, in which was revealed the secret to extinguishing the witches’ demonic power and she managed to write it down the night before expiring.

My dear – my treasure – my light of lights; please be careful!

Your mother,

Ÿĩşŧƍƞ

Tears pricked at my eyes and my fingers trembled. Conflicting emotions tore through my body, setting my blood on fire and a chill down my back. I wanted to sob and cry over the loss of the mother I could not remember. I wanted to tear my hair out in anger over the evil that took her and my grandmother so early from me. But most of all … I wanted to hide myself under a rock in fear.

Fear of failure, fear of losing everyone I loved, fear of death. These fears permeated to my core. But stronger than all of them dwelt the fear of disappointing my mother. I wanted to please her. And I knew now, that she was always near by, protecting me. I could almost feel her, a gentle touch on my shoulder, comforting me.

The air in the room no longer felt enough. My throat was dry and suffocating. Tucking the letter under my pillow, I grabbed a shawl and a lit candle before slowly opening my door. Nalda was no where in sight. Carefully, I tiptoed barefoot across the dark hall towards the entrance till I had safely stepped outside into the cool night air.

I breathed in deeply and sighed.

Stars twinkled brightly in the clear, dark sky and a soft breeze shifted through the night. Everything was eerily quiet, except for the chirping of crickets and the croaking of frogs. The sound of water in the pond relaxed me as I listened to the ripples splashing softly against sandy banks.

I crossed over to the bridge, I leaned over its edge to gaze down below to watch the moonbeams dance off the glassy surface. The candle in my hand mingled its own warm glow with the cold light of the moon. I watched as the flame flickered in the wind. Then I blinked. I was no longer staring at one candle in the water’s reflection.

There were now two.

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Honora
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Honora wrote a review Review · Nov 11, 2019

I bet you're getting sick of me! I'm running out of ways to start these reviews! XD

“I happened to overhear Nalda send you to your room without eating,”
Nothing wrong with the sentence but I just wanted to ask you something. Would Nalda really be able to treat her like that? I mean, for one, even though she is young, she is married and it would be Iyagi's place to "dicipline" her, wouldn't it? I just find it odd that a housemaid of sorts has so much control over the princess.

It was from my mother.
Ok so how did she know? Did she glance down at the signature or did she somehow recognize the handwriting? Details!

I fear that that great responsibility rests upon your shoulders, my child.
Here I would say that this. Try to avoid using "that that". It's just confusing and most of the time, can be avoided.
I don't know why, but when you were explaining her fears, they didn't sound quite right. I'm not sure if it was because you were telling us instead of showing or if it was just me or if it was an info dump...? I can't place exactly what it was but it just sounded a bit off to me. ;)

Despite my nitpicking, I really do love this! It is awesome. I love how her Mom has a different name for her...I mean, what does it mean!? I also love how Iyagi snuck her food. It brought me back to the days when I would get sent to my rom without lunch or supper and one of my sisters would sneak me something. It was always awesome because then you'd get out of chores with food in your belly anyways! ;)

Anyway, I love the ending as well. You always manage to have a little cliffhanger at the end of each chapter without it being WAY overbearing. I have a tendancy to make my cliffhangers a bit too big for each chapter lol.

Good writing! Keep it up!! :D :D

Your friend,
Honora <3

Thanks for all the encouragement! It's really helpful and totally helps me to clarify a few things once I edit. I already look forward to when I'm finally done and can go back and fix all the mistakes. But for now, I'll try and keep writing.

Thanks for all the encouragement! It's really helpful and totally helps me to clarify a few things once I edit. I already look forward to when I'm finally done and can go back and fix all the mistakes. But for now, I'll try and keep writing.

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Horisun
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Horisun wrote a review Review · Aug 16, 2019

Hello! It is I, Horisun, here to review your work! (Obviously)
This was a really great chapter, and the letter from Kkachi's Mom was a great insight to her personality! It fleshed her out a lot more.
The one thing that I want to point out is that it doesn't really make sense for part of the letter to be bold. Idk, maybe I'm wrong, and it's meant to look like she pressed harder on the paper, but it pulled me out of the story for a moment, so I think I should point it out.

Other than that, this chapter was great! I can't review the next chapter right now, but I will tomorrow! See ya then!

Thanks for pointing that out. I wanted to emphasize the names but it's not my wish to pull readers out if the story. Thanks for noticing!!! Wow, u are almost finished all the chapters I posted! :)

Just finished chapter 25!

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Awru
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Awru wrote a review Review · Aug 9, 2019

Avace is her Blood name. OMG!!! This story just got intersting by ten thousand folds. How do u doo it gurl!!
First of all you described kkachis emotions so welll. I could feel her pain through the words. It was like feeling so lost for her. Yearning for a relation, for mothers love she didn't remember. It was very beautiful and i proudly say i got teary eyed ok maybe i cried hysterically for a bit too. Also the letter of Kkachis mom was very well written. Smooth,simple,great choice of words and simple in quite an elegant way. Quite a treat for ones mind. Ok now lets get to my usual crazy state of brain after reading all the chaps I don't care. I need to let it out somewhere
Nalda is soooo adorable. She does not let Kkachi feel like she doesn't have a caring mother looking out for her. I really like how Kkachi and Naldas relationship has been growing more and more. Its really heart warming.
Also i am happy about Iyagi and Kkachi feeling comfortable around each other and the recent development in their relation leaves with this fuzzy feeling inside. But i would like to request sth here. So far most of the lovey dovey emotions are from Iyagi, Kkachi just blushes You ain't going anywhere with that kkachi. The request is i have always wanted balance in relationships in books that is. I feel unset when emotions are from just one person the boy or girl. So i would lovveee if kkachi showed some feelings too. Like jealousy,affection or sth. But maybe i am being impatient about it,!!!

Did you marry a good man?

Believe me mom she got the best one *smirks*
Also i love the epic names and bolding them really enhanced the effect. Correct formatting can go a loooong way.
One thing is a bit unclear though. I did not understood whether Kkachis mother was like supposed to be a chief like kkachi herself is being the daughter of emperor or her father was the son of chief. Also i would love if you shed some more light on kkachis parents relationship like reminding him of beautiful past memories or sth. That would give a really touchy emotional feeling all over cuz he seems to reeaallly love her. Maybe they were like Iyagi and Kkachi.
I was no longer staring at one candle in the water’s reflection.There were now two.

Ah!! Peace

Hope you post the next chap real soon too. Till then Goodbye :wink:

Keep Up the Excellent Work :smt023

peace out

Thanks for the incredible review Awru! I had a feeling that the title "Chieftain's Daughter" would raise some questions. It literally became just a title over the years. If you were the daughter of the one who possessed power, and inherited that power, you became the "Chieftain's Daughter". I wasn't sure how to explain that in the letter - so I left it out. Kkachi is truly the Emperor's daughter and her mother's. No worries about cheating or affairs or that sort of thing. I look forward to going into her mother's back story. And yes, her mother and father loved each other very much!
About Kkachi's feelings for Iyagi - she doesn't really know at the moment. To be honest, she is a bit oblivious to that sort of thing and is becoming more and more focused on the mystery surrounding the death of her mother (among other things now) ;) That kind of takes up most of her attention. To be honest, if I was in Kkachi's place, I would be second guessing every move Iyagi makes. He is really nice and kind to begin with. And though its obvious to some (*coughs* the prophetess Awru) I believe that Kkachi feels that most of what Iyagi does for her is out of the kindness of his heart and because they used to be best friends. I intend this love story to develop slowly and I apologize sincerely for the pain I cause in advance. I love your input and you are very good at predicting what happens next. Love your suggestions and look carefully for hints of them in the later chapters cause I plan on putting them in! :)

Awru replied · Aug 10, 2019

Ooopp!! Ofcourse i know there r no cheating affairs or whateves. I have really come to understand in my life that the blood running through someones veins matters alot. Maturity comes from age but pride and honour are inherited.
And with this family there is no doubt of dignity. My question was that Was Kkachis mom the daughter of chieftain and kkachis father became Emperor of Geodaehan like Iyagi will in the future??
Yeah!! I knew i was being impatient. I developed power for slow romance. I watches Star vs the Forces of Evil gawd it basically killed me. But i like when things go real slow too. I don't really like rushed up romance. It just doesn't give you those feels. Like in PJ i thought Percy and Annabeths love ws tooo rushed and as a result i lost my interest in their ship. *Shrugs*I am that way. So best of Luck!!
Oh come on i am not that good at predicting*blushshes

You are awesome! I love how you put into words exactly what I felt about dignity!!! So intuitive of you gurl! And yes, Kkachi's mother was the daughter of the chief and the Emperor was the prince of the Empire when they first met. Perhaps I will be able to go into their story a bit. If not, maybe I'll write a prequel. Thanks for your support. And I'm glad that you are good with things not being rushed too. Kkachi does seem a bit oblivious though, doesn't she! It actually makes me laugh cause I think I'd be the same way. How about you?

Awru replied · Aug 11, 2019

:wink: I am glad we think the same about dignity
Hmm!! I thought so. I think its like a tradition for chieftains to have first born daughters. I would really love to know more about her parents. Its so saadd
Yeah! Me too. Kkachis life has been pretty much a rollercoaster so far. She has so much going on. It just leaves a teensy bit of space for love. Lol!!

FlamingPhoenix wrote a review Review · Aug 8, 2019

Hello it is I FlamingPhoenix again with yet another review for you on this lovely night, and like always to help get your work out the green room.

Okay let's begin. *rubs hands together*

Okay so I did find one very small mistake.

No on was safe,

the word in bold I think you meant to say one. I have a feeling it's just a typo, so nothing to worry about!

Okay now I can get to the good part.
I just love this chapter I has gotten quiet interesting, why you ask well I will tell you.
First off I think the way you open up this chapter is perfect, I got to see a new side of Nalda, and that was really laughable, I've never seen her scold Kkachi that bad, I think she is getting fed up with Kkachi always getting into trouble and not acing like the princess she is supposed to be. So that was a little shocking, but I did have a good laugh over it.
The next thing I really like is that Iyagi heard Nalda yelling and came to give Kkachi some food, I just hope he had enough food. I think it's also really sweet because his love for her is starting to really shine through, first he dives into the water after her then he gives her food, I don't know if Kkachi is seeing this, or if she is a little dense! XD Come on Kkachi he so loves you!!
Anyway what really tipped this chapter over the edge for me was the letter from Kkachi's mom, that was very sad, and it also made me very worried, clearly Kkachi's mother had to deal with the White Winter Warlocks other wise she would still be alive, but she didn't really so if she had to fight them or not, so I still have a feeling she could still be alive.
It was also nice to find out some things about Kkachi's family, and her bloodline. That answered some questions for me, like were did she get her power from, but I guess I don't need to wonder any more.

And oh my gosh, the emotions you flooded into this chapter, it was really sad after Kkachi had read the letter, that was to sad, *Whispers* It almost make me cry...but don't tell.
But the good thing is that I am more into this book then I ever was before, that letter form Kkachi's mom just moved the story to a whole new level and I can't wait to see what will happen next, because you left me on a really bad cliffhanger.

Anyway that's all from me for now. I hope you will post the next chapter really soon, because I am dying to know what will happen next, And what is this world Kkachi's mom speaks of. OOHHH so many more questions VERY BAD!!! Keep writing and have a great day or night.
I'm going to see if I can get some sleep after that chapter! XD

Your friend and faithful reader
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion!!

Thanks so much! I'm glad that this chapter touched you. It means so much. As I get deeper and deeper into this story it starts taking me along different paths I wasn't planning on. As a result, things are starting to get hazy and not even I know exactly what's going to happen. I have a general idea for the next chapter, but I might get surprised myself. I look forward to hearing what you think once it's posted!!! Thanks for all the support my friend! :)

XD welcome to writing a book my friend! It happens to me as well, once second you know what is going on then you have know clue what your writing because it wasn't in the plot, but don't worry about it because it sometimes works out. :D
I to look forward to the next chapter!

Glad that it happens to a fellow writer ;)

You and me both!



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