Young Writers Society

Hello! Feltrix here for a review, which I'm sure you can figure out from the bold writing above. Sorry this is so brief.

This seems awfully brief for a council meeting, not that I have much experience in the matter. Still, there could be more discussion on a course of action, maybe even discussions on other matters. Another thing that could add comedic value is some twisted version of pointless political ceremony, mention to Binvoclar Lizard overlords or something equally insane.

"The only thing they've done to us is bring the hurricane..." They ONLY brought a hurricane. Oh, well in that case, I'm sure there's nothing to worry about.

"I vote to attack the Travellers head on, before they attack us." There could actually be a vote on a course of action. They kinda skipped that part, which seems a bit tyrannical.

"They've already sent us a message that they'd lend a hand should we need it." Shouldn't everyone have known this before hand?

That's all, and I fully expect an edition of the Frost Lark News to be published, regardless of the fact that it's review day. I rely on this to know what's going on in the world.

Hey, crobbins here for a quick review!

So, I'm not caught up on your previous works (my bad) so I can't really speak about the plot development. My apologies!

So, I like the idea behind this. The idea of a whole story being through notes from a meeting is a great spin on a non-traditional storytelling method! I think the fact that the notes put who was speaking in bold first helped the reader follow the storyline nicely, and helped them not be confused.

I also like that you put the members of the council first in the notes. It helped the reader to be able to look at exactly who was involved in the meeting before actually seeing the contents. It helped me, personally, stay oriented while reading it.

The only spelling/grammar issue I found was it the word "it's." Just remember to check on those!

Overall, great job! I'm a huge fan of the formatting you used (fangirls). I'd love to read more of your work!

-crobbins

What is next!!!!!??????? I must know!!!!!!! *Waits impatiently.*

Council Meeting 2/19/17 Dracula's Notes

I appreciate that you made the council members list. It was good to have a list of all the characters in Frost Lark's current council. If you turned this series into a book (and it would be a scrap-booky sort of book) this would be a supplementary page to serve as a reminder of where the story's at and who's in it.

I don't think its worth the risk... We don't know their military power.
You missed the punctuation in it's. This happens again in Mayor Clayton's bit. And Harvey's. I'm seeing a pattern. Since these are someone's notes, I guess it doesn't really matter. It just looks like an error when it's all typed out nicely and not messily scribbled on some lined paper.

I thought this meeting was a little short (in my mind it went for less than three minutes) but it does provide a bridge between plots. Now we know that Cloud Ice is returning to the story and they're going to join forces against a common evil.

As to the end, I would've loved a sarcastic comment from Sonja Wallace, as this all seemed a little too serious for a Frost Lark installment. But maybe Sonja is just a very serious person. XD