Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for violence.
Dill was getting a new pig today.
At Mr. Dill’s Butcher Farm, the scent of fresh meat hung thick in the air—pork, ribs, lamb chops, and more. The farm had been in his family for over fifty years, but after his grandfather passed last month, it was time for Dill to step up.
The California sun was merciless that Sunday, baking the earth beneath his boots. He wiped the sweat from his brow as the black butcher truck pulled up, kicking up dust in its wake. Inside was his friend, Cony.
Dill approached the truck, peering inside.
"Hey," he said.
Cony waved back and stepped out, his expression unusually grim. Together, they unlatched the trunk and pulled out the caged pig.
The pig was scrawny, almost sickly-looking, yet something about it felt... wrong. Its beady eyes gleamed with something unnatural, and its breath came in slow, deliberate huffs.
Cony sighed, shifting uneasily.
"Listen, partner... you might wanna keep an eye on that pig. Little fella’s been to multiple farms, and... strange things happen when he’s around. Just be careful, alright?"
Dill laughed, shaking his head.
"How can a pig be trouble, Cony? You must’ve gone bonkers. Anyway, I’ll take care of him. He’ll be no trouble to me."
Cony just shrugged.
"Whatever you say, man. I gotta go—got plenty of ladies waitin’ for me."
Dill punched him lightly on the shoulder.
"You womanizer."
After Cony left, Dill took the pig into the barn, placing it in a separate pen. He patted its head, feeling its coarse bristles beneath his palm. The pig didn’t react—it just stared.
That night, Dill couldn’t sleep. He tossed and turned, his mind restless. Something gnawed at the edges of his thoughts, something unnamed.
He got up, slipped on his boots, and stepped outside. The wind whispered through the trees, and the crickets sang their eerie lullaby.
Then—a snort.
It was faint, but it was there.
Dill frowned, glancing toward the barn. The pigs were supposed to be asleep.
He shook off the unease and went back inside.
Morning came, and Dill went about his chores. He fed the chickens, the horses, and the rest of the animals before heading to the barn.
The moment he stepped inside, his stomach twisted.
Something was wrong.
The air was thick, heavy with the scent of blood.
He moved toward the pens, pouring feed into the troughs—until he noticed one pig was missing.
Dalia.
His first pig. His prized pig.
Dill’s pulse quickened as he searched the barn. Then he saw it.
His breath hitched.
Dalia lay on the ground, her body ripped open. Her insides were gone, devoured. Her snout had been bitten off, leaving a gaping, bloody hole.
Dill staggered back, his hand clamping over his mouth.
He had seen death before—he was a butcher, after all—but this? This was different.
After the initial shock, he forced himself to move. He picked up Dalia’s mangled body and carried her outside, dumping her into the meat processor.
As he returned to the barn, his eyes landed on the new pig.
It wasn’t eating.
It just lay there, motionless, its belly rounder than before.
Dill frowned. Had it gained weight overnight?
He shook his head. He reasoned with himself that pigs were hungry creatures—they ate anything.
Weeks passed.
Every morning, Dill found another dead animal.
A pig. Then another. Then a horse.
The horses were terrified, their eyes wild with panic.
One morning, he found his strongest stallion lying on the ground, whimpering, its body torn open.
Dill buried the horse, his hands trembling.
Enough was enough.
That night, he decided to stay awake.
At 12:00 AM, Dill slipped on his boots and crept toward the barn.
The night was silent. Too silent.
He opened the door softly, peering inside.
Nothing seemed off.
Then—a sound.
Not an animal sound.
A shrill scream, mixed with a snort.
It was wrong.
It was unnatural.
Dill’s heart pounded as he flicked on his flashlight, sweeping the beam across the barn.
Then he saw it.
And his blood ran cold.
The pig was standing on two legs.
Its stubby hooves twitched, malformed into monstrous hands.
Its eyes—black, soulless pits—locked onto Dill.
Its snout dripped with blood.
Its teeth—razor-sharp—sank into the flesh of a dying horse.
The creature devoured it, tearing muscle from bone, chewing with sickening delight.
Dill couldn’t move.
The pig sniffed the air.
Then—it turned to him.
Dill’s breath hitched.
The creature grinned.
Before he could react, it lunged.
The last thing Dill saw was jaws—wide, gaping, filled with teeth—closing around him.
Then—darkness.
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Hello hello! It is I, CrimsonTears (or Crim for short)! I am here to read and review this amazing piece! Typically, I read and review as I go and so as usual, that is also how I will review your work here! Let’s dig in, shall we!
As always, I like to start with the title and genre the writer has chosen.
Butcher automatically to me sounds very ominous and intriguing to me. And the ominous feel is even more defined by your genre choice of Realistic/Supernatural! I am very excited to see how the supernatural element plays into this story!
Anyways, moving on into the actual review here…
Already off to a great start here with this description! I love how you described how the scent is so strong at this farm! And the fact that this is in California makes it even more understandable that it has a very heavy scent because of the sun.
I like how you introduce the supernatural factor. It’s not straight in your face but it is deliberately and silently clear something is not right. And the way you further describe the big at a first glance even further highlights this fact before it’s even spoken that strange stuff happens! I really like how you introduced the ominous factor if you can’t tell, lol!
Once again, this is an amazing way to set the scene and atmosphere! I instantly got shivers! The way this continues is very interesting and causes me to sit at the edge of my seat!
What a shocking turn of events!! I did not expect this at all! I was expecting maybe Dill to abandon the farm altogether or give the pig back or abandon it somewhere! This ending never crossed my mind and I actually gasped! Very well written story!
Some critiques I have is…
1. As you did give some description to the big I would have likes also a little more description on at least Dill since he is the main character.
2. Because of the gore factor I think this should be rated for an older audience.
But now for the highlights!
1. Obviously as I mentioned before you had me at the edge of my seat and I was not expecting that ending! This was an amazing read and I wish this was actually longer! I wonder if you will continue this story where maybe someone comes to visit the farm after this makes the news as I image it probably would since this is a long owned family farm!
2. I like how this isn't a cookie-cutter story. While there are stories out there of say Skinwalker Ranch, this has it's own unique story that makes it very distinguishable from others which is another reason why I enjoyed it so much!
Overall this was a great read and I hope to read more of your writing soon!
Have an amazing rest of your day/night!
Crim signing out!
Thank you Crim for your review, and I'll make sure to keep in mind your critiques.
Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the malicious S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - Dill simply must kill a pig. It is his job, after all. But this pig…there’s just something about it that is…not right…
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I don’t have recommendations to make as of right now, but if you want, you could expand on the farm’s lore. But tis’ up to you!
Chocolate Bar - That pig on the cover is unnerving, but even more so is the way you describe the pig. As the incomprehensible horror that it is. One could say that there was a moral to the story, a moral of not killing animals, but Dill seems to genuinely care about his farm and maybe, there doesn’t need to be a moral. Maybe there is just horror. I like how you space out words to really hone in on how monstrous this “pig” is. Butcher related horror with fricking pig masks always freaked me out…the beady eyes…*shivers*
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a frightfully gruesome story! I enjoyed reading this, as I do with all of your stories, and I do hope that you keep on writing-especially horror! There is never a bad time to write a horror story! And now…
I wish you a lovely day/night! ^v^
Thank you, and btw love the pfp.
yw and thx!!!!