The world is changing
year by year,
New people are being born
Other lives have been torn.
The World is changing,
every month or so,
Children are not children anymore
And grownups are groaning in distress
The world is changing week by week
What is right is bad
and what is wrong is good.
The world is changing day by day
All over the world distress is heard
from the mouths of the oppressed people.
The world is changing hour by hour
There is someone new in office
his ways are too sour
He captures the ruler of a country
and sends them back to the U.S.
The world is changing minute by minute
The old leave behind their memories
and make way for the younger ones.
Their time is done.
The world is changing second by second
every person is greedy and selfish
not wanting to give even a half of their means
for someone who needs help.
The world is changing moment by moment
and each one counts
if we all do our part,
there will be no need for worry.
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Hi there! This poem does speak truly to what's happening in the world right now. It will only worsen. It's common for any young person with any sort of awareness to think quite deeply about the absurdity of how truly dark the world is. This poem channels those through this well flowing and concisely written verse. I like the repetition of the "world is changing" however I did notice that you capitalised the w in the second one "The World is changing" perhaps by accident since it's the only one. I mention it because thinking it was intentional, I saw it as an attempt at personification of the concept of the World, as if its a living thing, constantly changing and experiencing chaos.
The world changes a lot on the micro scale, but really, it has been a while where nothing has truly happened. Nothing has truly changed, it is the same stories being told over and over again. Flipping back the decades has us beholding pages that are akin to a looking glass of today.
It ends hopefully, which is nice, but its a drop of hope in a ocean of hopelessness. Be it naivety or be it strength, I hope it's right.
Thank you for your review><
Nice poem
This poem hits hard, very well written! I love how each verse (?) has a time frame that’s getting smaller and smaller (year, month, week, etc), it makes it flow very well.
One of my favorite sections from this poem is “There is someone new in office / his ways are too sour / He captures the ruler of a country / and sends them back to the U.S.” because it’s simultaneously very specific yet also still vague. I also love how the poem starts out neutral, then gets to be negative, and then swings back up to end on a positive note.
This was a wonderful poem, keep up the great work and I hope you have a great day/night!
Thank you for your review! xoxo, lovelydove :p
Hi, Dragon here to leave a quick review on this interesting poem.
This seemed a bit too specific. Most of the poem is about people and the world at large. It could apply to almost anyone, so this seemed out of place. But if the whole poem was meant to be about the common American office worker and that kind of dreary life, I guess it works.I find it interesting how most of the news and media of our world is negative. That's what sticks out and gets the views I suppose, but I like how you ended the poem with a little hope.
I don't really know all the rules of poetry so I won't comment on that, but I liked how you kept of the theme of how the world is changing faster and faster. Every moment we can choose to change for the better.
The poem was good overall though the theme was a bit depressing. I'm glad you made the last part hopeful or I would have left feeling down.
But poems are meant to be expressions of how we're feeling and sometimes the world looks bleak. We all need a little light in our lives.
May blazing dragon-fire light your path and ignite the flames of your inspiration.
Thank you for your review! ><