*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “FNAF fanfics”. This is a little bit of my AU with William Afton’s past and whatnot. FNAF was created by Scott Cawthon. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
“I can tell you right now, this isn’t going to end well. Stop talking to her.” Wilma said.
William had told his older sister everything about Mena, from how she smiled at him to how she spoke to him. He told her that maybe they could both be something more, that maybe he finally found love like how the movies depicted.
He would have thought that Wilma would be more supportive, but instead, she criticized him.
“But maybe the curse isn’t real! Perhaps it’s all fine! And maybe-“
“Maybe what? You want to stay with her, fine. But don’t say that I didn’t warn you.” Wilma said crossly.
So? He’d prove that there was no curse, that he deserved to be with Mena, and that an Afton could be happy.
What Wilma said meant absolutely nothing.
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Hi vamps! Time to to viral and pick up a cold (one) while im at it.
I liked the opening. Who is her? What is her? In typical horror fashion, Mena smiling seems terrifying rather than comforting.
I think you're talking sbout Wilma.again, but honestly, the way it reads seems like we're still on Mena.
I think this would hir harder if William said it to Wilma instead of just thinking it. Also, if Wilma really thinks it's a curse, i would expert more emotion and convincing. Being cross feels more in line with someone letting you out to dry or telling on you to your parentd, not risking your whole family's lives.
Overall, this is such a short piece that it's hard to find a lot to hold onto ok, there's a curse and some aruging siblings, but why would we really care? That's all pretty typical trope stuff.
You mention in your note thats it's connected to FNAF but from what little of that i do know, I still dont see a connection to it here, and would have no inkling to even guess it as fanfic of any kind.
All in all I just think its too short and unspecified to be very engaging on it's own, and if it's a backstory to something, it doesn't feel long enough to be much of a discovery.
~Messy
Well actually, it%u2019s a little bit of a backstory into my AU William%u2019s past. I might add more if I feel like it but I%u2019m not entirely in the FNAF fandom.
Thank you for reading.
Hmmm... I don't think I like this one. Very short idk.... idk who Wilma is very confusing me think... But I wish it would continue, love to see what happens next. But I am a bit busy sometimes causing wars... idk. In the white house reading this feeling great knowing I'm supporting small artists... I love FNAF... let the world know George W. Bush loves Five Nights at Freddies and all respective franchises.... lol...William Afton is MINE tho...not this Mena girl...idk though.... I love self-instenting myself into fanction... I am y/n lol. Very short though... I don't think me and this fan fiction will work out but I like the shortness because I am a busy man... in the White House. I need to go create a bill or something...will be coming back though because I have very little free time since I am George W. Bush... just to let y'all know, I am golfing right now in Congress reading this fanfiction... what if I dated William Afton... I dream about this every night when I am sleeping in the White House... and making bill sometimes I daydream that William Afton is cuddling me with his purple hands...I love William Afton and I want to be his girlfriend... anyways the press secretary is telling me I need to address the country about bills...so I have to go but tell that Mena girl that William is MINE...and he is my girlfriend/boyfriend (sometimes both)... I love William Afton and I think of him daily... I could comfort him in a way no one else can... we share similar traumas... anyways goodbye William I love you thank you for the short read...don't forget that I love you and Mena is a beach and she wants you but I love you more... I think of you while waging wars on foreign countries....
Wilma is William%u2019s older sister.
Glad you enjoyed!
Hello there, friend! This was a very short, short story, but I still enjoyed reading through it
You have a nice hook sentence! Right away I have a lot of questions: What are they doing? Why won't it end well? Who is this person talking to? Nice job getting us engaged!
Ah, so it seems like William is talking to Mena, a girl he loves. He wants to have true love like it is like in the movies, but it seems like Wilma does not approve. I am curious to see why she does not approve and what happens from this. Because, from what I can see, Mena seems like a really nice person... hmm..
From what I read next, it seems like there is some sort of curse. Perhaps a curse that is paced on William or someone else in the family. But because of this, Wilma does not want him to be with Mena. I wonder what the curse is and what would happen if he didn't leave her? It seems like they do not know for sure if it is real either, so I wonder what they do know about it. It sounds like William is trying to prove that it is not real. And what Wilma says to him means nothing.
I was just not sure about this sentence and what it meant ^^
Overall, I really enjoyed this short story. It was quick, but I hope I can read more of it soon! Thanks for writing and posting <33 Have a great day!
Your friend,
Ellie
The Afton family is the main family in FNAF and they have all faced some form of misery. William is the main antagonist. This is what I imagined William%u2019s past to be, where his family is cursed with unluckiness. I am working on this AU and in the meantime%u2026
William and his kids
The dancing girl
These connect to this story!