*This fanfic is under my folder titled “FNAF fanfics”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1395. FNAF is a video game/movie/book franchise that was created by Scott Cawthon. This is my AU of how two central characters to the plot met. They’re both eight in this. Anyway, enjoy!*
The carousel ride had been quite fun, but when it was over, Henry did not want to leave William-that was his name-behind.
So Henry asked William if he wanted to hang out with him and when William said yes, the both of them went off to the food stands and the carnival toys, laughing with each other as they did so.
“Do you think that we could make a festival like this?” William suddenly asked.
Henry blinked. He was a little surprised but happy that he asked, because he himself wanted to make a festival someday.
“Yes! I think so, but that would have to take a lot of work. Why do you want to do it with me?”
William shrugged, “Because you’re nice and I like you.”
“Oh. Thank you.”
“You’re welcome.”
And so they both went back to playing carnival games together, Henry smiling to himself as he thought about the new friend he made.
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I remember these two! It's cool to dive into how they first met, and I saw that there's also a version from William's POV - neat!
I like that Henry takes the initiative first here to ask William to hang out for longer, and then a little bit later William takes the initiative when he asks about making their own festival someday. It's not a one-sided relationship (so far, anyway - they literally just met!) and this scene demonstrates that they both already care about the other. It's really sweet!
You've lent a magical tone to that childhood moment of meeting a once-in-a-lifetime person who you can already tell will be a best friend. This is lovely!
Wolfi <3
Heya creeper~
I remembered that I wanted to check out more FNAF :3
First thought is actually: Why did you out “that was his name” in here? “Henry did not want to leave William-that was his name-behind.”? I mean this already a rather short snippet so maybe a description would have done better here?
That said, I like how you set this up, that watching this festival is what causes the spark for them to later work together. As I understand it what they end up doing is not quite like a festival but the spirit is similar enough, no? (Okay, I feel like English is leaving me, I have trouble articulating myself, sorry @.@)
I find the convo between them very sweet :3
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