Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.
*This song/poem is underneath my folder titled “FNAF fanfics”. FNAF (Five nights at Freddy’s) was created by Scott Cawthon. At the end there is a popular nursery rhyme most commonly seen in “Mother Goose” stories. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs <33”. Enjoy!*
William Afton, a man with a tinged heart
A desire for violence
Craving the destruction
With a knife-sharp wit and three kids
Three cursed, twisted kids
Michael Afton, the oldest
The one who watches
The one who bullies his little brother
The one who doesn’t know how to break away his own facade
The one who will watch his siblings die
The one who will survive
The one who will never stop thinking of his past wrongs
“This and that” “What if” and “If I just”
Poor Michael, you can’t change a thing
Move on and fight the demons that Dad created
Sean Afton, the middle child
The one who always cries
Can’t help but break away
Thrown into the mouth of an animatronic
Always haunted by The Nightmares
Never can he truly grow
Always “The crying child”
Clutching his stuffed bear and shaking like a leaf
No one will come to save you, child
And Elizabeth Afton
The youngest
The one who saw good in Daddy
Who wanted to be him every step of the way
Scooped by a robot made just for her
A clown in his eyes
Elizabeth, dear, you’ll never be the apple of your father’s eye
Even after you die
William Afton, if he’s going down, they’re all going down with him
It’s blood, it’s kin
It’s the Afton way of life
He won’t back down without a fight
“Ring around the rosy
A pocket full of poises
Ashes, ashes,
We all fall down”
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Sean Afton is just the name I gave the Crying Child. The Crying Child has no confirmed name, and it is not confirmed whether he is the middle child or the youngest child. This is only my AU.
Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression
Well this is quite the heartless little tale and I think it does a wonderful job there outlining who William is and who each one of his children happen to be. Really showcases a good snippet into each of their stories.
Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;
Well that establishes that title quite well I would say. William with his many tendencies for horror and his three kids who seem to be as cursed and twisted as he is.
Well looks like we've got someone who tends to get up to a lot judging by that description although at the same time I am detecting a sense of hopelessness about it too almost as if doing all of that has amounted to nothing and is destined to always amount to nothing.
Well that did get kind of dark there quite quickly. Looks like this one is less evil and much more just cursed to forever be stuck inside one of William's own twisted horrors. That definitely makes things a lot more terrifying there.
Well that is truly the worst of the lot. The one child it seems who was able to find some good and happiness out of all of this sick horror and she pays the price quite dearly stuck forever and never getting back any of the good things she gave to the world.
Well looks like William Afton is quite the character and he isn't going down without taking everyone with him. Given what we've learnt so far about him that certainly isn't very surprising.
Aaand that's it for this oneee!!!
Overall
Overall I think you've done a wonderful job bringing this tale out to us here. I'm only vaguely familiar with FNAF lore so this was quite a nice little introduction to all of these characters.
As always remember to: Take what you think was helpful and forget the rest!
Kate
Hello, vampricone!
I've watched enough Game Theory FNAF videos to say this was a good fanfiction poem for the game series. Your story delves deep into the twisted lives of the Afton family quite well, providing a haunting portrayal of the characters. The intricate details and introspective nature of each character's journey are masterfully woven into the narrative. Your portrayal of Michael's internal struggles and guilt-ridden conscience, Sean's heartbreaking vulnerability, and Elizabeth's yearning for her father's approval evoke a profound sense of empathy and sorrow. The use of poetic elements, such as the "Ring around the rosy" rhyme, adds a chilling and eerie undertone to the story, enhancing its atmospheric depth. The juxtaposition of the Afton family's dark legacy with the innocence of childhood creates a powerful contrast that lingers in the mind long after reading.
Overall, you capture the true horror of the series well, innocent children being stripped of their childhood and turned into monsters. At the heart of the animatronics was someone's baby, who had a bright fear and no sense of the horrors of the world. But now they've been twisted into something unrecognizable, thoughtlessly murdering others. It's a great fanfiction that shows how much you love the series. Great job! Thanks for publishing; I enjoyed reading.
Happy Writing!
Wist
So glad you enjoyed!