Hello! And might I say what a nice poem!
This is an untapped subject methinks and I like the title because it implys the entire Peter Pan story in four words, which adds a present predisposition to the poem, if you take my meaning.
The last verse contains a couple of things I would edit, both matters of opinion. Replace the - with a "that" and the following line end would gain a full stop. Subsequently you would remove "that plan". Also the last comma would be replaced with a full stop. Merely opinions.
Hope this helps,
Take That You Fiend!
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