Hello there! Review day review
Guess what was spot on? Your capitalization and punctuation. So many people disregard capitalization and punctuation on stylistic grounds, so I'm glad you included them.
A few things interrupted the flow of your poem. The word "turmoil" did. The lines "But when I don't write, I can't settle down" and "To pour my heart and soul into something." Interrupted your flow. Also don't fell the need to repeat 'write', 'writer' and 'writing' so much. Sometimes a simple 'it' or 'it's' would suffice.
You could also try to employ more emotion in this poem, as Aley said you did tend to go towards a conversational speeches than comparisons. That's okay, but you could find them useful in a piece such as this.
Other than that I enjoyed your piece of prose. Keep on writing!
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