why?
Just because.
But.... why? How?
Too hard to explain.
I love you. That's not enough?
T-too much. I don't deserve it.
You're worth it.
No.
Just explain why, then.
I like you. I do.
like?
I want to love you. I can't.
Why not?
Not sure.
Was it me?
..no.
But....?
Just. I don't know.
The truth was a lie,
frozen on my lips.
Ice falling, shattering,
waking me from my dream.
Each touch, a promise.
I broke them all.
Each word, a composition.
I couldn't listen.
You read my note..?
Yeah. I understand. Still friends?
Of course. Ugh.
Ugh?
I feel terrible.
How come?
I feel like I lied to you.
Not to me, yourself
No. I just read me wrong
Sometimes you have to read over it to get it right. You did. Though I
wish you loved me too, I won't force you. I can't. I want you to be happy.
I'm still sorry.
I did lie though.
Not on purpose.
I thought love would come.
How stupid was I?
Let me explain.
No, I need to.
It was her
after we talked.
She told me about what she said.
I know.
Well.
I didn't believe her. But I guess she does like me. I didn't like her back, not really.
Then what happened?
I thought it over.
And?
I realized I liked you, and wanted to love you.
But you don't.
No.
I understand.
Do you?
Kinda.
I am so sorry.
Yeah. I know.
Holding them back.
The tears, so cliche.
But the salty drops
are all I have left.
Why is love so sweet?
It gives you wings.
Why is love so cruel?
It takes them back.
Remember our first kiss?
I told you I was scared. Nervous.
And I said to not worry, I would protect you, help you?
Yeah.
If you need me, I will still come. I still love you.
I....
I know. You're sorry.
Ugh...
Picking up the pieces.
Not much time, huh?
So much emotion
in so little days.
We met, becme friends.
We confessed, and we loved.
You fell, and I struggled.
We parted, goodbye.
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I liked this poem. The way you wrote the dialogue seemed a little awkward and I think that%u2019s the charm of it, really. It captures the awkwardness of love (not everyone is Casanova) and it painted an image of the two talking and one pulling away.
I also liked the descriptive words you used. Like when you wrote
It was very dramatic. And I just liked some of the phrases you used.
Was my favourite one. I really quite liked this poem, as I said earlier. Keep Posting
Perhaps the unorganization that animekaratepup pointed out(which I for one didn't notice), could be symbolic of the nature of the subject? I like it. But, I'm still trying to figure out the title.
I like the "dialogue." And pretty much everything. It packs emotion, and the dialogue gives it imagery and voice. Good work as always. I have yet to find fault in you, no matter how hard I try. Believe me, I try. >D MUWHOHAHAAHAAAA
I like your poems because they're to the point and such. They state an opinion rather than questioning a motive without answering it, you actually support a solid point.
...Actually, I'm questioning the lyrical style now...
--Skis
So I know this was ages ago but I had the urge to tell you the title is inspired by a song that goes "I want you, I need you, but there ain't no way I'm ever gonna love you. But don't be sad... Cause two outta three ain't bad"
Ahhh. Beautemous.
I, for one, love the way you conveyed the dialogue. It was confusing, but it worked.
Also confusing when you switched to a more lyrical style, but I can understand that.
Make sure you're consistent--the first word isn't capitalized, but for the most part, the rest is. (like? isn't capitalized either.)
You randomly stop using punctuation here--the lines before have periods, and these don't.
I understand what you're doing here, but I was sad to see the style change. Before this, it was all short, kinda choppy sentences. I liked it. It spoke of a long friendship, because the two people speaking didn't need superfluous words to explain themselves. Maybe insert another comment from the other speaker? Maybe have the speaker here trail off?
That's it. Thanks for posting this; I enjoyed reading it.