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Wow! I just found this on your signature. This is really good! Songs are very open-ended musically, especially since there's no way for readers to see the tune, but I can tell how you laid it out rhythmically. Do you have a melody for it yet?
I have something in mind, yes, but have yet to lay out the actual melody for it. Composing music is a lot harder than I thought. ; )
I sthis a song, because it really sounds like one!
I really like this, I truely do.
I don't think there are negatives, so I'll start with the posatives.
Detail - Amazing amout! All of it's deatailed.
Lyrics - Clearly, all the lyrics have been thought about carefully, and thats always great, because you ahve something greatb to show at the end.
Layout - GREAT! You've spaced it all, and set it out neatly, so it make it even better, and there's more to be proud of!
Please, keep writing more!
Well, well, well, I got to say this is good, really good the rhyme scheme was decent at most. And to me it really sounds like a love song from the way I was reading it, mainly ones that you try to clam yourself with after you been crying a long time. But that is just my honest opinion, but I can't really see anything wrong with this, but then again thats me and I'm not to good at reviewing songs or poetry for that matter. Just giving it a try really, but yes thats all I can say about this.