Hi, another review from the apple dumpling gang. This seems like a really nice, sad poem which has a lot of meaning. To me this poem reflected the regret of a person not being able to do anything while his/her loved one walked away. it's lovely how you' ve expressed your emotion. I also love the repetition of that tune- its the foundation of your poem.
On the other hand, I felt like your poem could use punctuation.
Overall- a good poem. I hope to read more of your work soon.
- anshira
Points: 747
Reviews: 103
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