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Hi, Ley! It's Serrurie, here to leave a review! Let's dive in:

The Good Stuff
- Ooh, this is a prose-type poem! I always love those
- I love the art you put at the beginning, which connects to a woman being a 'vessel' in the man's eyes.
- The man's answer shows bias while also being beautiful and poetic. Instead of simply saying what he thinks a woman is he paints a picture that allows the woman to infer.
- Adding on to what I just said, the woman's counterarguments show layers and depth to her perception of herself. She questions the man's definitions while at the same time, defining herself (whether her answer is positive or negative). Some of what she says bounces off of her own words, because she shows herself as weak AND strong:

when i am tenacious?

if i can’t even bear myself?

Serrurie

That was really good! Nice! I will definitely be reading more of your poems!

Just want to say this is soo good.
In the modern day world, there are so many unrealistic expectations for women in life, just existing and living the same as everyone else and yet men sometimes demand such ridiculous things. Cookie cutter perfect shapes are expected, but what happens if we don't fit?
It's such an interesting and slightly retrospective look into feminism and misogyny, and the style you portrayed it in was quite beautiful, rhetorical questions, rephrasing, the poetry sort of line breaks. It really helps emphasize the whole situation. Love your comparisons as well, this is actually incredible!
All the best,
DevilBeMyDarling

Hiii There Leya! Cupid here, thought I'd hop on this train of thought and give you a short review!

So for me I really love the idea you posed by challenges the stereotypes and misconceptions surrounding women and you portrayed it so beautifully and powerful, Especially the imagery used, such as ships, benches, etc effectively contrast the views of the man.

I also love how you highlights the strength and resilience of women, questioning the limitations imposed by society. And the repetition of the phrase "how could I" is just WOWW! It really adds and creates a strong sense of self-reflection and defiance. Overall, Leya you did such a wonderful job writing this!! (Now if only you could get my brother to read this :,D)

Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed reviewing!

Fly high writer, Cupid.

heyy! that's a great poem! I like the picture too, did you paint that?

Hi there! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Hey friend, Ellie here I decided that I wanted to leave a full review on this piece. I thought it was incredible beautiful to read and think it deserves more than a little comment, hehe. Let's get right into it!!

Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
Let's begin with my impression and interpretation. It begins with a man being asked the question "what is a woman" to which he replies in ways that are quite stereotypical. Women are vessels in the sea, while men are the waves that move and control them. Women are weak and fragile and imperfect and in a broken condition. As if they are lesser versions of men. Women are these cattle being chased by wolves, showing they are the weaker link that is controlled by men, incapable of making their own decisions. And it mentions women as being creators of life, which I interpret as meaning that this is their sole responsibility over their career and passion and opportunity that they could achieve in the world.

The second part of the poem is the writers, or maybe your, response.

but how could i be a vessel,

in your oceans,

without drowning?

how could i be weak,

like the playground bench,

when i am tenacious?

how could i be cattle,

in the open meadows,

if i am the sheep?

women create life."

how could i bear a child,

in this cruel world,

if i can’t even bear myself?

Beautiful poem!! <33

I like this a lot! It's so thought provoking and awesome!