Sweet Nothings That Taste Like Ambrosia

Firstly, let me say; lovely.
I absolutely adore Greek mythology and have written a few myth-inspired/based poems and short stories myself ☺️
The only piece of advice I have to add would be to fix "Hera's jealously" to "Hera's jealousy". Typos happen to the best of us (I literally have whole text strings where my friends laugh at my spelling because Autocorrect has either abandoned me or hates me with a passion).
Anyway, I love this piece and can't wait to read more of your work!! 🫶💜

Hello Hello, I hope you dont mind me popping in with a quick review. I thought I would stop by as you have been quite a busy writer and I am glad to see the muses have been treating you well. I fear that this might be a little light on feedback but I hope my thoughts will make you smile nonetheless. I should get into the meat of this review soon. With that being said let's get into it shall we?

I should not be surprised with your use of Greek myths but I must commend it still. The prose is lush and filled with nods to Greek myths like the possible reference to the Fates through string. I also enjoyed the idea that love can be as addictive as ambrosia something the gods revere yet abuse. It paints a very vivid picture of how love can have its highs and lows, things can be as sweet or easily slip into toxicity if not checked. I also love how you could compare ambrosia sometimes keeping the gods immortal/divine ( If I'm not mistaken ) to our bonds being platonic or romantic being what makes us human.

I'm sorry for that very long paragraph as you can tell I think this has a lot to offer. The gods you chose were excellently paired with the points you were making. On top of that, the style felt alive and lush with imagery. I know by now this is something both you and I adore a lot.

Now onto my very light feedback and as I always say you by no means need to take any of my input.

The only thing that stands out to me as off is the use of heated twice. Forgive me as quoting is not easiest without a text version but having heated used twice in the same sentence is a bit awkward. I will admit that I sometimes do it as well but luckily it's a quick fix. Maybe sub out heated moments for burning moments, it might not be the exact feel you want though. However I feel it gets the same idea across, feel free to experiment with it.

Besides that small nitpick I cant find much else regarding feedback. You did a great job with this and I hope your other works are going just as well. ( I also hope your classes don't stress you out too bad by the way! )

As always I enjoyed this work, keep writing and remember to drink water!

You weren't kidding when YWS said this was an really short read. Glad I found another poet willing to share their poetry on site. Anyways, let me start my review.

The first thing I noticed about your poem is how differently formatted it is from traditional poetry. I don't know what it is or why I love it so much, but its really interesting with an cool cherry on top. I do think this is one of its strong suits since as many probably do around here are traditional poetry and the such. Keep up at this point.

But an second and last thing I wanna mention is the scope. If possible, why not try to mention an few more mythological beings in there to round out the story? An lot of Greek gods/goddesses were into romance, so why not give them an spotlight, too. But if an small scope is what you are going for, sure!

Overall, I think this is an really solid piece. I apologize if I cannot add anymore than that. But thank you again for your attention on reading this review. Goodbye.

- Purple67