Young Writers Society

Hi, Ley, I took immediate interest in your poem and really wanted to share my thoughts!

I think the concept of this poem is so unique and incredible. It's one I never thought to write about, and your creativity really shows. The poem starts out a bit fun and simple but turns into something more meaningful and purposeful. The transition from "I" to "we" and "us" is perhaps my favorite part of this poem. The line

Because when you look into me, I become you.

Hi there Ley!
^^ I love how it’s structured and I love the effect the font has on the whole poem. It is very philosophical and gives off warm fuzzy feelings yet a deep sadness too. It’s interesting.
It talks about how shattered and filled with layers a person can really be and I’m here for it! I feel like it talks about how we tend to hate ourselves and we forget that we aren’t bad people and we don’t deserve that. Our inner child doesn’t deserve a future where they cry and cry in their bedroom, isolated from society and loved ones. Love it!!

Wow, more Ley poetry!!! This makes me so so so happy. It is wonderful to see poems from you, as well as more poetry in the Green Room for poetry reviewing obsessed people like me so let's jump right in!!

I often watch others walk by without a glance,
And I'm repaired each time I crack.

I can't visibly speak, but we're beautiful,
And I wish I could tell you that.
I wish I could tell us that.

Hi Ley,

Love this piece of work.

Sometimes we have the ability to mirror to people the darkest aspects of their soul. Some appreciate it and use it to heal, others not so much. This sometimes makes us feel like ghosts walking the earth watching life as it goes by.

Surrounded by people but still alone.

We seem to not form real connections with those around us, maybe it's just because we see through the bullshit. We see others around us obtain things that we can only wish and/or long for.

Sitting with your inner child and comforting her, being the figure she needed when growing up is a sense of comfort and healing one cannot describe to anyone.

Your piece, without really knowing the theme behind it, spoke to those aspects of realisation in my own life. It was personal, and I love work that doesn't tell you what to make of it or what you need to experience by reading it. It touches a part of you and brings it to the forefront.

Really well done!

Keep going

xxx