A/N: Choices regarding punctuation/capitalization (or a lack thereof) are intentional. Thank you!
Hello Lavvie!I will start off by saying you are a wonderful writer! I absolutely enjoyed reading this poem. I think we often write better when it is for people we feel the most for, whether it be love or hate. I enjoy how you mention palm, as in the palm of the hand, but then talk about islands and waves, it is a beautiful metaphor. I really enjoy the final lines of the poem, "with like minds/ & solid hearts". That is so beautiful and simple, raw. Great job and continue writing!
Hey! I really liked this! I particularly enjoyed the lines, "We are shards, of amethyst & jade". For some reason these lines just really seemed to speak to me. It painted a beautiful image in my mind. I loved how the reader goes on a journey throughout the poem, ending with the lines,"together with like minds, & solid hearts"It's a lovely ending. You effectively told a beautiful story about love in this and I adored it! Keep up the writing! I look forward to seeing what you do next - Vex
Hey there!I saw the poem and since I loved the title, decided to say a few words about it First of all- the title is quite powerful, and I like you maintain that overall feel throughout the entire piece. I also like the play with colors, which comes from the use of objects like gemstones
where you are an island&august waves lap arterial shoals
111,283 Literary Works • 596,522 Reviews