Hi there!
It was really a wonderful poem. You used simple words to bring out so much beauty in this work. I loved the format and how you went on describe about different body parts in every stanza. Each one had a great imagery. The flow was so consistent. I could seriously imagine going lots of fast food that I eat every time going into my belly just like hail stones from the sky :p You have put in a lot of thought to bring out these amazing interpretation of different body parts. 'spilling out thoughts that are now marbles', this is such a beautiful line. I paused for a second here just for appreciation. At last summing up with describing about body compared to a sentinel also felt deep.
Great work <3
Keep writing. I will try to read more of your works.
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